Hi... that's it. The hell are you here for? Move along. Hi though!
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I liked this chapter a lot. It was really funny.
Alright. Understood. Good luck!
I kinda understand what you're doing with this story. The only noticeable problem that springs out to me immediately is the fact that since the Mc is so far back from cannon and considering the cursed technique. I fear that the Mc will become overpowered then the cursed technique becomes useless. Undoubtedly, Kenjaku was strong, but he wasn't all mighty. That's what made the culling games work, Gojo vs Sukuna. It all came from Kenjaku's planning. His past and his intelligence/cursed technique is what made him so interesting. If the Mc is going to be overpowered, what's the point of making him like Kenjaku? You also said he will be going through many different clans then make his own. Which gives him access to literally every single Dojutsu (if he's born in Kaguya's time). Anyway please don't drop. (If you do drop this. I beg of you to return to your Toji fic) Good luck!
Writing Style... Personally, I think the Author's writing is amazing. The way they write easily shows the Personality of our main character. Other characters aren't bland slates and actually act like their canon selves. The description of areas like the classroom is also very good. Story Development..... So far, so good. During the beginning chapters, the goal wasn't clear but it becomes more apparent later on. Though, I will warn you, it does seem like the Author will branch out to different worlds eventually. Character design... Not much to say in regards to that. I guess you could say the Mc doesn't really have much of a defined appearance. By that I mean it's not mentioned all that much. Updating stability..... I don't feel too worried about it. I assume we'll get a chapter at least every 5 days. Judging form past uploads. World Background...... I gave it 5 stars beacuse the story seems to be headed in the darker places of Hope's Peak. But it does branch out a little. When it comes to other worlds. So, there's not really any extra world Background other than what already exists. Overall..... It's really good. It has a clear direction, fun characters and a nice writing style. Ps: This is important. The Mc has a streamer group chat. As expected, it's people from other worlds. Like spiderman. And it's clear he'll add more people. Perhaps from his own world. Junko may or may not be the love interest. To wrap things up, all I wanna say is, I hope for more chapters. Wonder if the other games will happen.
Oh thanks man. Glad you enjoyed it.
You know you can take a break off this fic. Or just start a new one. Don't burn yourself out.
Just noticed your comment. And I guess I'm gonna follow cannon and make it Sasuke. The reason is, I've had some thoughts about doing a Boruto fix which will continue from this. What do you think? PS: I may or may not add a few 'moments' between Sakura and Ino. But nothing too much. Here's a cool image
What do you mean by that?
Hey Author. I think it'll be better for your story if you change it from novel to fanfic. More people will see it that way.