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Especially for sex scenes, correct pronouns would be great... maybe that's just my preference though?
I'm assuming this is not being manually translated, which I get, but I'll make a last mention. Pronouns, you see 'he' 'she' 'him' 'her' when the AI or whatever is translates. Take time to check if it's correct. Readers will thank you for it. I hope you continue this series.
as she focused her* You're novel is well written thus far. I especially appreciate your system, you've done well introducing the setting and magic rules. Please remember to be consistent in your pronouns. Especially male/female. If you do this, I guarantee you'll stand out among other non-native English speakers. Well done!
I think webnovel needs a better AI to go through pronouns. Thank you for your service in pointing out this repeated travesty.
Yeah or it was lost in translation, but it's not a trait where the prof speaks in repetition as a personality trait or quirk from what I can tell. It's not a huge issue, but repetition of any phrase can make the writing feel that way. Because it's not just this paragraph. I appreciate the discourse;) I'm going to lean toward translation.
I like where the story is going a lot. Well done! But seeing the term, Spiritual Clothes 3 times in a short paragraph is a bit much. Love the story, suggestions from a nobody :)