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first' potion, then changed to pills. stay on one track friend. I totally lost the track, while reading, got confused....????
Too much explanation......
you really like talking to your self, finishing in single chapter.
Hey! buddy! first confirm what's the rank of protagonists talent? Somewhere in the lines it was -B while in last chapter it was -F, choose one at least.
What's with all that repetition? Gone sleepy.....
what's with 'First person to jump into third person perspective. Either use first person phrases or write in third person view. Making difficult to read you know.
Writing same thing again and again, haven't you seen before uploading chapters that, what you mistakes you have done it. Waste of time. Instead of phrasing same words, sentences even para, why don't you write on plot. Seriously good story but...
Writer, try to read by yourself before uploading. This and some previous chapters were messed up.
Please try to read before you upload cuz although story is interesting but grammatical errors are a lot, well it ruined all the mood.
Add more conversations and flow of continuous story instead of writing same old thing again n again. that's ruined all the mood, intersting plots. I like this story but your describing of same old things in every chapters ruining all fun.