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Bete belonged to the Vardis family before joining the Loki family, but many members of the Vardis family died on an expedition to the dungeon while Bete was elsewhere. After that, he joined the Loki family on the recommendation of his God, who left Orario with the rest of the family except for Bete, who decided to stay.
He is not naive, he just has a rather childish personality. He was only 14 years old before he died and liked to spend most of his time locked up in his house reading, playing video games, or watching anime when he wasn't studying at school, because the neighborhood he lived in was dangerous, with gang members who would often confront each other or chase each other with machetes, resulting in at least one person dying quite close to where he lived each year. Therefore, he is not unfamiliar with the bad nature of humans and knows how to deal with it accordingly, but he still tries to enjoy many of the things he considers fun. By the way, sorry for not having answered this message before. Usually, I only stay on the writing page and, if it's not a main message through a paragraph line or chapter comments, I rarely notice when someone uses a comment to respond to me.
I just realized there was a spelling mistake in the title and on the book cover! Instead of Pallum, it said Pillum. How on earth did no one tell me this before?! I feel like an idiot xD
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I don't even know you xD, but joking aside, I don't use Discord and much less English to have read about that idea. I also don't go on social media pages, and my only hobby is reading manhwas in my original language, which is Spanish. But that aside, I hope you write your fanfic enough so that you can read mine and see that they are not copies and vice versa. I hope things go well for you.
I'm sorry, the automatic translator changed parts of the text to my original language.
If you're asking whether this is a translation of a Chinese fanfic or something like that, no, it's an original novel, but English is not my primary language.
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