Chill_Capybara

dude at least pick a pov. dont just jump to first after you started in third person. if you wanted it to show the mcs thoughts just add his thoughts. make all the descriptions third, like how he reacts to it.

read up to 8 chapters. its pretty good this definitely needs more chapters. good work author. a few comments on points of improvement though, although its just something I want implemented and I hope youre reading this. the part where hes an actor, maybe add ideas that explores his abilities using acting in this cultivation world, like deceiving people and easily convincing them because of his act, and maybe make his acting, using charm to potential women.

mc should get a weak cultivator and make that cultivator stronger using his family's resources and kill that cultivator, making a farming system of making cultivator prisoners stronger and making them strong just enough for him to kill them, litttle by little. like a farm game exept with human cultivator prisoners as cattle.... right?

The story is good and the first few chapters were clear. The way the mc is made is good. The way you describe the situation is new and the slow burn pays off

Dude I think what youre trying to say is that the author forgot lots of the logistics and other details to make the story fleshed out and look more realistic. Like there was lots of potential but then it gets thrown in a paragraph then he moves on ti the next without much thought in explaining more.

Okay so honest opinion? This book is controversial explaining how some nationalities are beaten and all that, even if its fiction in the latest chap. This feels more like a way to send some sort of message to them, and the story... hmm.. its pretty normal for my taste. System used and world little by little beating them up. The thing doesnt add anything new, or a spice, the story for me. In my most critical view. Is kind of bland, I think it needs more chapters to make it pay off or a better hook and make things make more stakes for the mc

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Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate the comment! I'll do my best to structure it!