Iguana32
I write mostly for fun, honestly just a hobby of mine. Check out some of my work if you're interested, and reviews are always appreciated, good or bad. https://discord.gg/ZrWk2jqjbV
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Iguana326drespondió a Trace7187fr
The spheres cracked open shortly after, leaving the bodies of the cold fish perfectly intact in his hands. "Not bad," He commented to himself, throwing one of the fish up and catching it in his mouth as he walked towards Issei.- Iguana3215dComentado por
Eyes are supposed to be blue, but AI sucks at making Dragons so I dropped it.
Raon: - Iguana3215dComentado por
Same as the cover (duh.)
Jin Iwata: - Iguana3228dPublicado por
Like most people on this comment section, Chapter 44 was the nail in the coffin for me. The sudden death of his parents felt awfully rushed and curated solely for forced character development, and the fact that all his new peerage members were hurriedly introduced made them feel flat, and not nearly as impressive as I believe the author wanted them to be. However, since there's not much else for me to say that hasn't already been said I'll list some positives. 1. Grammar, there were hardly any mistakes. So I have no qualms here, solid job author you definitely know your stuff. 2. The character development before 44 was actually quite alright, except for some overtly edgy moments here and there. I like this version of Ajuka and I think you did a good job of fitting him to the mentor role. I was also quite interested in he and Sona's relationship before the MC turned into the living embodiment of that one Kaneki pannel. As for advice, I think before diving head first into a major plot point you should take a step back and consider how you can really flesh it out. Try viewing the change from a readers standpoint. Really SELL the narrative, as a fellow author on this site I know the struggle, believe me. I do not except anyone to be perfect, God knows I'm not, but I hope you learn what you can from writing this fic. Hope this review has been helpful.
- Iguana3228drespondió a AlmightyPriest
too late, AzazelxJin is already cooking
With just two words, Jin had been left utterly speechless. - Iguana321mthComentado por
Quite late for a start, but better late than never.
"Arthur, my boy," Alex began, his voice carrying a hint of pride, "since you've turned eighteen, it's time for you to embark on your own Pokémon journey." - Iguana321mthComentado por
I think maybe having him fight against types he is weak to would be best, since as a Dragon there isn't that much merit to fighting rock & ground types. That way not only will Duraludon have to start making up for his weaknesses, but the MC can improve as a trainer by being forced into situations that make him think out of the box. Also maybe going against really fast pokemon would be good, since speed is something Duraludon struggles with. Other than that, loving the story so far --- keep it up!
Anyway, hope you enjoyed the chapter, leave your thoughts on how Drayton should train Duraludon, and aside from that have a great day/night. - Iguana321mthComentado por
There are no such thing as weak pokemon, only weak trainers. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Hearing Drayton's words the trainer opposite him grumbled. "You only won 'cause you had a dragon," he complained, handing Drayton nearly 200 Pokedollars. - Iguana321mthComentado por
Speed is a big issue for Duraludon, Wonder how he's gonna substitute for that.
Boldore, to his credit, recovered quickly and retaliated with a powerful Rock Tomb. Sharp, jagged rocks shot toward Titan with incredible speed. Titan, although fast for the average steel type, was still far too slow to dodge the attack, and the rocks collided with his metallic body, causing sparks to fly, but Titan stood firm, showing his resilience. - Iguana321mthComentado por
Interesting. Good way to minimize the amount of foolhardy trainers rushing at wild pokemon beyond their skillscope.
The Threat Level Index was a classification system used to assess the danger posed by wild and captured Pokémon. It operates on a scale typically ranging from F to S, with S representing the highest potential for danger and F the lowest. - Iguana321mthrespondió a iliacubeCh 37 Chapter 37: Loki's Arrival
- Iguana321mthrespondió a AlmightyPriestCh 35 Chapter 35: You're Outclassed
- Iguana321mthrespondió a Nekolover2And right as the venue was about to enter lockdown, a strange set of blue luminant gates had appeared right above where Jin was seated.
- Iguana321mthComentado por
Harem AND System.
Hey, I have a question, What is something that as soon as you read will immediately make you drop a story no matter how good it is, you can't just say something obvious like harem or system, you have to be specific.