So far..... Nothing to correct when it comes to writhing design.
Writing design and choice of words a awesome to say the least.
But I will like to know how our characters look like, also the background description is vague.
Well that's all guess.
Keep up the good work.
Not bad
And in fact when it comes to word arrangement ur is better than mine....
But I want to also point out somethings like:plot, world design,character design that's way I have seen that needs improvement for now (but will update if there is more)
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Not bad at all, when it comes to word arrangement your very good.
Keep up the good work, and at this rate it will become a very nice book in the not to distant future. 👍👍👍👍👍