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Scarface36994hComentado porunnecessary and stupid he's literally overpowered just being Kryptonian
He would simply obtain things every day by performing specific actions.- Scarface36994hComentado por
no message from Kryptonian parents
He knew this because he possessed superhuman strength and had discovered the spaceship hidden in the basement of this house. - Scarface36991drespondió a Pzero
completely misses the point of why one piece is as good as it is when people say shit like that. U can write a si with ur traits just make it palatable
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ayt u swear so much tho tone it down a bit
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Ngl iIwas tempted to review y well just because ur synopsis was good and simple and The rumble rumble fruit comment was nice.👍
You know, when I wished for an exciting life, I didn't mean the One Piece world. Sure, you get to explore the vast sea like it was portrayed in the anime but the reality is completely different. Not every pirate is like the Straw Hats, most are disgusting criminals ranging from lowly thugs to individuals who have the power to straight up ignore the Law. - Scarface36992dComentado por
where tf did they get wood release from
"The culprit had both the Sharingan and Wood Release." Kakashi said, his voice steady but tinged with frustration. "Because of this, the suspicions were directed at the Uchiha clan." - Scarface36996dComentado por
cringe af just went from a to b. 0 to 100
"But I realize now, that I was meant for more." Kai closed his fist as the energy seeping through his body slowly but surely was seeping the feeling of ecstasy within him, "I am here to annihilate this world of these fake gods, heroes, and villains alike. I am here to cleanse this world of these gods by any means necessary." - Scarface36996dComentado por
ai
But now, as Kai stood alone in the dimly lit apartment, the absence of his brother's presence weighed heavily upon him. The silence that hung in the air was deafening, a stark reminder of the void that Leo's absence had left behind. - Scarface36999dComentado por
ugh
As it turned out, the mask allowed him to change his appearance into anyone and mimic their aura. - Scarface369910dComentado por
this chapter was good. no need for AI 👍
On top of that will be materials and Gu that I will use to refine Gu, which I will likely fail a lot. And also Gu that I want to just buy outright. This expense is the one that can be adjusted based on my situation. - Scarface369910dComentado por
ai is so obvious i just usually skim read it(like last chapter ) because it writes everything the same way and over does it especially with word choice.
Lastly, I want to express gratitude to everyone who has supported my novel with Powerstones. With this chapter, I have reached 15,000 words. - Scarface369910dComentado por
making a fire in a tree makes no damn sense
Small sparks became a fire, and he immediately fed some leaves to the fire. Then, when the fire actually became quite big, he contained it in a small space after that. He didn't want his good home ground to be burned entirely. - Scarface369910dComentado por
right near the other snakes riiight
There was a part of the grey grass around that had taken fire in the earlier battle. He added some more wooden sticks there and roasted the meat atop the fire. Doing this was not the best of ideas as it might attract other demons, but he did it quickly enough. - Scarface369910dComentado por
the first thing ur MC does being get a mate is lame Ngl. Kinda reflects u as an author's priorities for this
Indeed, unlike Dona, his abilities were rather limited in combat against people with higher stats, and he didn't even know all of their limits. As for Resistances, he did have one, which he got after creating his mutant bloodline, but that was also useless in this scenario. - Scarface369911dComentado por[Dream Shock (Low): Send an invisible shockwave through your eyes that will stun the person who looks at you and make them fall into their dreams.]
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yeah definitely cmdk influence
[Thus, demons infiltrate the Other Worlds once in a while to gain more souls of foreign races to devour and grow stronger.] - Scarface369911dComentado por
cmdk influence ?
The eggshells were effective, and warmth flowered up inside my stomach. And inside my mind, some sort of puzzle began to complete itself with each piece I ate, and when I ate the last piece of the egg, the puzzle completed itself. - Scarface369911dComentado por
nobody in the replies mentioned jiraiya
"Kekekeke, so finally comes the end of this foolish toad...." Kuang Luo To thinks, closing his eyes and embracing death without fear as he sees his entire life flash before his eyes in his final moments. - Scarface369911dComentado por
depth just keep showing some depth for ur characters and don't be afraid to not follow canon. Thomas seems to be in a unique position similar to full fledged iron man revealed but even more public use that. I'd say he's similar to Superman honestly. Also what's Thomas's symbol? a full teeth smile(like one piece flags)or lion something.
What I'm doing wrong, and what you want to see more. I will listen to you. And will try to be better.