Mickaelle09
A 19 years old Christian writer trying to improve every day, as well as a good books (= smart Mc & plot, fantasy, romance, extra MC, antihero MC, no love triangles, no incest, no harem) seeker.
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I was thrilled by the rythm of the first chapter! It was dynamic and the Mc was introduced so smoothly that I held high hopes for the book's developement. Alas, that good penmanship was replaced by an uninspired one in the second chapter. And unfortunately, it is not the only problem there is. Right after his death, some goddess appeared out of nowhere and amongst all the dead people in the world decided to save our poor Mc. At that point I already wanted to drop. But I clung on because of what that mesmerizing first chapter had sold me. But yet again , I was disappointed. Because the plot is just your typical" get reincarnated into a medieval fantastic world and save it" . What is even worse is that the first chapter seems useless now, because all the important informations can be found in the second chapter , which by the way , is unnecessarily long for what it tries to convey. All in all , I think the author needs to put more efforts into creating original ideas and bringing them to fruition.
Then author , I believe you should have mentioned earlier that even among demons , soul projection is incredibly rare .
The fights in this book would have been better if a clear powerscale was designed. Here , we only know that that demon Guy is strong but we don't know how unbearably strong he is compaired to Mc and the others. Also, Mc himself , who just got his powers some weeks ago can already use them like this?! Are ability a think that doesn't need training to be used so proefficiently? None of that has been specified so it just gives the impression that the author didn't think toroughly on this matter. They are many more problems but I guess I need to make a review to further explain them.
living their best life I see 😁
Thanks for the correction 😁
Thank you. I'm not a native english speaker so I might have misunderstood the sentence.
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You'll stop wanting that when your fav character will be the one to die
Will the real Jullien Evenus please stand up ?
But I guess the real reason why people consider this ability weak is that in order to induce powerful emotions in someone , one has to feel the said emotions with the same intensity. So as the examiners said, it can really drive the user insane and unstable. I can understand why one might find it weak.
I honestly hope he'll be able to act like his true self sooner.
Then she really didn't think thoroughly before doing it . because people are watching her, so the news can easily spread and reach Atticus. Besides, if he is a nerd, as she herself said, I don't see what popularity she could have from going out with him. In comparison, I believe being Jackson's girlfriend would be more profitable, popularity-wise.
Although the interactions between characters were well written , it couldn´t cover up the chapter´s main flaw which is that it is just an info dump ( i had stop midway i the chapter for this reason)Nothing managed to get me interested enough to continue i'm not a fan of less than fifteen years old Mcs so i'll leave this novel at that.May God help you with your works author.
The chapter started so good but ended up disappointing for me.Good points : -It’s written in a simple way so it's easy to get in the book and to understand what happens.-The Mc seems somewhat relatable and relaxed( i don't like cold Mcs)The bad points :- The author likes descriptions.😩It's not a bad thing per se ( it helps one get immersed easily when it's well done).But the problem here is that the author gets carried away in his descriptions.If you analyse the chapter in depth , you'll realise that it's this lenghty because of unnecesary descriptions and info dumping. - The info dumping is really glaring.The author could have spread the informations througout the chapters but instead he did it here . If only the world presented in this way was interesting enough or so original that it was too hard not to explain it like that ! But unfortunetly , it's just your common solo-leveling- like world.
I wonder what he fantasizes about since his world is already a fantasy of its own.
With just this ?