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I’m disliking this mc already, he seems unnecessary cruel and ungrateful.. reminds me of the young master that gets face slapped in any other novel

Yay a generic power up that makes her somewhat relevant to the story…

Unnecessary…

So far it’s a pretty decent title, (ch 134), but the inconsistencies in the details are far too frequent and decimate the flow of the book. It felt like every 3 or 4 paragraphs the author would directly contradict what he wrote in the previous chapters. If the author kept track of his own words it would be worth a few coins, but until then I’ll be finding something else.

“The small things” dudes literally lost more time than he’s spent awakened. Things like that retract from the story. Breaks immersion and tends to leave a bad impression for readers. This app if for up and coming authors who need the criticism to improve and possibly have their works published in the future.

Making him a major blockade for the mc at this point would be redundant. His backstory is held up by him simping over a chick that was willing to dump him for mc. Too fragile and meaningless to be turned into the big bad

Every time I see this it immediately makes me think the author doesn’t know themselves.

(Late to the thread) but a lot of people don’t show any signs of PTSD for years. They can subconsciously suppress such emotions, especially in high stress environments, until they reach a point of stability.

See this! I just gifted the story: Dragon