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Yes, but it'll be later when he is older
There was a football world Cup in 2002. You can search it up on Google ...
It just means that the system's capabilities are lower than a higher-ranked system. I'll explore it more in the future. Hope you continue enjoying it.
Thanks for the suggestion. It's just that webnovel rewards having shorter chapters since it cares about update frequency. I would have preferred posting one long chapter a week.
Thanks!
The premise is quite interesting and the tone made me chuckle a couple of times. Definitely an interesting read and a story with potential. I hope you keep writing!
Thanks for sharing your opinions. While I agree that the majority of childhood arcs fall flat, I will try my best to make it exciting to read. I intend to have Nick heal and find his core through this arc, as such it is quite important to the story. I hope you continue to stick with it and enjoy reading it!
Thanks a lot for your review! Could you elaborate on what you mean by rhythm? Since Nick is just 10 years old, he cannot play professionally until at least the age of 15. I do plan to have him be a part of a youth academy where aspiring football players gather if that's what you are referring to. Again, thanks a lot for the review! And hope you continue enjoying this story!
Thanks for your comment! If you read the prologue, you'll get an idea of the system. To answer your question, yes, the system will be anything but OP. Nick has to work for his goals 😀
Your writing is easy to read and flows very smoothly. The action scenes are definitely a huge strength as it felt very impactful. While the premise and genre are quite common, your decision to take things slow might result a well polished story. I loved the pacing in the first few chapters. Some advice from me would be attempt a more show don't tell approach. This could be through the thoughts of the MC, or dialogue since omnipotent narrator kills the sense of immersion. Also, revisiting your chapters after you're done writing them a few hours to a day later will help you spot mistakes easily. Overall, a pleasant read and keep posting