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Hi, well done for starting to write a book. Your idea is really good and concept very interesting but I think you rush too much at the beginning missing at least 15 another chapters which you can write easily if you start reading your book from beginning and listen to the dialogue your characters could be having. You can just write it on between published chapters and update in inkstone...it will be making your book more fluid to read...you need to find out more about your story to make it less like a outlines of a story. I wrote you this comment to cheer you up because your book could be amazing if is more detailed and easier to read.
Ok, I feel so sorry for her. He is such a poor excuse of a male. He is not fit to be king, husband or father. He is not a even a man yet...His father is not really despizing him....he is trying to push him over the edge to teach him to be Independent king, he eighter step up to him or he die...This man is excusing all his action and fears by being a monster...bathing in his own guilt to cover his eyes of sufffering he cause to others...feeling sorry for himself....folowing stupid rules...he is afraid of invisible enemies...instead of fighting them...letting women fight for him and shifting blame to traditions....then asking witch for advice so he doesn't need to make his own decision...prophecies will not come true if he doesn't do anything.... It is interesting story but quite hard to read because of the obvious disregard for life and value of woman as an human being... I hope this king grows up in the process of this book, so Ava can have her ending being best fighter at cost of blood of others...can it be even called a happy ending at all?
Exactly and it will be definitely interesting fight....xxx
Thank you so much for the chapter..so dark cliffhanger, is so great, really enjoying your book. Keep writing and don't stress, it is a journey which will take time and can't take over your life...So feel good about yourself for being creative and writing:) Excited to wait for the next chapter, take your time and well done!!!
It is not literal ears...lol. It is like the stones somehow suck in the moods and stuff going on around them. Actually it sometimes happen in our world too, that sensitive people can feel if something horrible happen on a place because if you touch a wall there it can make you feel suddenly sick, sad or scared...it works... Good place can make you feel good...even if you do not know the place history..it is like the atmosphere of that places which is somehow soaked in it.. But Sarcos have it strong as on steroids...it us unnerving ...because he cannot change it..it was done already...he can only watch it over and over again as he pass the dark corridors...
Thank you so much for your lovely comment...You were first!!!! so happy...xxx It is very heartfelt:)xxx I imagine if we exchange it into a story.. it will be kind of interesting for the other Kings and dancers to hear a Queen cry... it will inspire the little statues of crying Queen...for now they will have only statues of angry Queen it the sun fairy costume...lol
Yes, he had to squeeze it to feel it, slap it to have it and press it to please it....very hard...lol.. I love your comments, so fitting:-)
Magnus is master manipulator of Tyrell's brain...
Ye, Cosimo is too old stiff....but poor man was belittled in front of all his nation by his 7 year old. It be like falling from highest mountain to deepest trench for his pride...it could made him a bit crazy for sure....and it was not everything he had to put up with...it will come in future chapters...Xxx
Haha, adminstration skills, that is the way to call it...Ahh, I'm so thrilled you considering rereading some chapters, but I have to admit the Sarcos's meeting ones are my favourite and then the ones with when Ramse and Xander bought Sienna...I just can see his grumpy face when she made fun of him... xxxx But I have more chapters in waiting I can't wait to share with you...just have to write it all in order...sight... I'm so grateful for lovely reader like you:)