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Reiya93hrespondió a Mattex97Everything about the story Is dumb so I didn’t expect anything less. Honestly this arc has dragged on long enough
With a deep breath, Harry formed a series of hand signs, gathering his chakra for a more powerful attack. "Fire Release: Fireball Technique!" he shouted, expelling a massive ball of fire from his mouth. The fireball roared down the hallway, engulfing the agents in flames and buying them a few precious moments.- Reiya95hComentado porCh 4 Chapter 4: A Hero, I Am Not
- Reiya95hrespondió a Dao_Of_Sauce
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I was doing this for my own reasons - I wanted to kick the shit out of Loki and the Chitauri. I couldn't do the later without them invading and I couldn't do the former if he was already caught. There would be losses, but people died all the time. It's the one thing nearly everyone had in common. We were born, we suffered, then we died. That's it. All you could do between birth and death was to live a life you could look back on with no regrets. - Reiya99hComentado porCh 14 Shields reaction.
- Reiya913hComentado porCh 1 Cap 1
- Reiya91dComentado porCh 19 Chapter 18: Battle End
- Reiya91drespondió a holt_kessho
Well first you need to start by fixing the writing. A lot of beginners write like a play. But this isn’t a play and by putting the character name and then what they say afterwords it loses a lot of descriptions we could have had to visualize the scene better. The second thing is the system. The way it’s done is really redundant. You repeat it so many times the whole story is basically just systems screens. Not to mention it’s really confusing since you don’t put any breaks in between so we don’t know when something ends and starts. Not to mention that everything is in paranthesis which is terrible for a system. I would use brackets since it’s better and has a more system vibe. Also mc himself acts really dumb and the story doesn’t seem planned out at all. Like yoi just wrote everything in your mind at once and didn’t even check anything.
Ch 4 CHAPTER 3: first quest and gacha draws - Reiya92drespondió a PUERKO_SenpaiCh 14 Training Heroine's Brother, Xia Yuanba
- Reiya92drespondió a Shivam_Thakur_1883Ch 2 Third Chance, Reincarnated
- Reiya92dComentado porCh 6 chapter 5: the wand
- Reiya92drespondió a Reiya9Ch 4 CHAPTER 3: first quest and gacha draws
- Reiya92dComentado porCh 4 CHAPTER 3: first quest and gacha draws
- Reiya92dComentado porCh 61 Chapter 56 - The Black Comet
- Reiya92dComentado porCh 47 Chapter 43 - The World on Fire Part 7
- Reiya92dComentado porCh 35 Chapter 32 - Second Battle Part 2
- Reiya93dComentado porCh 1 Chapter 6:- Creation of realm of void and superheroes POV
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Honestly this story has a lot of potential but it’s terribly written. The author just writes with no soul and no heart. Idk if this is MTL edited or what but the writing is very boring, monotone, and repetitive. The main character is just boring and I can’t see anything special about her. I’m uninterested in her life and what she accomplished because it’s just repeated every chapter in a different way. The writimg itself is the worst part because it feels like I’m reading a history book. Just gives you information again and again with nothing to keep you readimg. Just terribly monotone and boring writimg
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How many times do you have to repeat it each chapter? We get it shes not normal she’s a warrior with relentless drive destined for greatness
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