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what sharp analysis ... a true Sherlock Holmes. nobody else could gave seen that. his quiddich experience was essential to make such a spot on observation. what a legend -_-
You are a SIMP?
#operationsoapopera is a go
so much time .... lol
well the story is great and i like the concept a lot. but there are serveral issues with the reasoning, why not take yen with him ? he swore to tell her everything and has spent 70 years with her already ... besides why would he need to let himself get kidnapped when pakkun detected suspicious people a long time ago ? your story is great and i know it's incredily difficult to write your own plot but i think it's a bit forced in this case.
i get that it would ve boring to see them groveling at his feet but i can't really stand her calling him an idiot ... what did he do that was idiotic ? save her life ? heal her body ? offer her chances in life ? yeah truly some idiotic stuff there done by an entity that could just not care at all if he wanted.
I know it's hard writing fights since he is kinda op, but wouldn't his inventory be able to automatically pick up fateweaver from a distance ? id have him leave it behind on purpose to level up.
my dudes don't know the real life helix company called helix studios ? xD
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why would he be interested in an acquaintance that has an civilian background and no Chakra from a trader family ? i mean this paragraph reads like she will come to leech of of them in 3 years in my opinion at least.
travel different worlds and grow without end while destroying plot
only three comments for that marvellous pun ? that's not enough 😂😂
this take on mind altering magic is way more entertaining than hp stuff with the subtle art of leglimency xD