Laplace_Scathach

Thanks for the update

Wait, edit on the first line. *I'm saying it's not that bad man.*

I'm saying it's bad man. In this website, there are only a handful of Date a Live fanfics and this is one of my top three, this review is based from what I have observed mainly from the beginning. Many would agree with me that the MC is kind of a simp in the early parts and also the way he acts. However, as you said. The storyline is getting spectacular as time passes, not gonna deny that.

I already made a review for this novel several times I guess, but this is an actual review. Writing Quality: 4.8/5 Pretty Decent! Errors and typos are rare, but it is still there so not 5 star. There are also some inconsistency on using some words but well, still good nonetheless. Story Development: 4.5/5 Pretty good so far, despite some confusing parts. But as far as the story progresses, rather than confusion, it rather makes me more curious about what would happen next! This is pretty good in my opinion. Character Design: 3.5/5 OG DAL characters mostly maintain there personalities. For Tohka's case though, I can say you did a pretty good job making her a YANDERE! And I have no qualms about that. Turning to the MC though...Not the greatest, and also not the worst. Rei seems to be a tricky character if I may conclude... Updating Stability: 3/5 I should've bluntly rated this as 2/5 except for the fact that you post LONG chapters. One chapter per week? Definitely not great. Hope you update more though. World Background: 4.8/5 I'm a big fan of DAL and FGO. Some things don't add up and gets rather confusing but it is interesting nonetheless! Overall: 4.2/5 Last time, I was just reviewing mindlessly since I really liked this story. The thing I want the author to improve though was the UPDATES. Back then, it was pretty good but now...uh huh. Despite its shortcomings, this is still a pretty good fanfic, I recommend this to DAL fans out there, this may interest you lot!

This DAL fanfic is sure interesting...also Kurumi as the main heroine for the story! Kudos for that! Now let's get on an actual review. Writing Quality: 4/5 Pretty good actually. There are only few errors here and there. However, sometimes there are cringe lines you know? Kinda bugging me but well, overall, the writing style is kinda decent! Story Development: 3/5 At first it was okay, I can still follow it quite well. Many things don't add up like the fact Kurumi began to like the MC despite from what Kurumi had gone through for Shido. However, this is quite understandable, this is after all, a FANFIC. Unreasonable things are the norm haha. Setting that thing aside. As the chapters progressed, the story Development seemed to get bumpy and weird(?)...at least, on my opinion, please respect it. Character Design: 3/5 Yup, the OG DAL characters somewhat retain there personalities... is what I would like to say despite some of their unreasonable actions in the early parts, but it is still readable nonetheless. However, the MC... he's not the greatest but also not the worst. Undoubtedly though, many would agree with me if someone said that Sajru was acting like a simp, ugh. Updating Stability: 5/5 No more things to add. This is it. World Background: 4/5 Nothing much notable unless for the fact that this happens after the main events of DAL. It is interesting though, ngl. Overall: 3.6 An average novel in my opinion. Usually, I drop fics like this by I see potential you know? I hope this will improve further as I continue to read this story! It's quite rare to find some decent DAL fanfic with fast updates after all!

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Hope you get these two instead of diva... You know, buy one take one thingy hehe

Hm... I approve