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Hello, people! I am a writer, new to Webnovel, looking for feedback on my writing. A bit of trivia about me: I love cricket and tennis. I like listening to pure music. Comment often and read on!
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Symbolism. Marco's the lost soul.
Sympathetic Person: What were his last words? Relative (sobbing): He...(gulps and weeps hard) he sighed... Sympathetic Person: ... At least make your last words valuable, mate.
You have succeeded in making me feel worthless. Without uttering a word. That's a new record. Very insightful, though.
I just--I can't even--how perfect is this? How much more Tito Charles can you get? That "...do whatever." is amazing, tho.
This is a great novel. The storyline and characters are well described but the writing quality can be vastly improved. The pacing is fast and the plot is quite engaging. The only problem are the minor grammatical mistakes, and if they can be improved, the work would become out class. But, aside from that, amazing work, Author.
This is a pretty great novel! From the unique plot to the amazing description of each Zodiac sign, it kept me glued to my screen. There are some minor grammatical errors, but the idea and storyline of the novel are different and extremely interesting. Every character has their own personality and the explanation of this new, magic-filled world is quite intriguing. Overall, it's very well thought out. Fantastic work, Author! :)
This chapter represents how people have hidden their pasts behind their bright smiles. Dacron, who I thought as amusing and entertaining, has a deep, apparently dark, past that haunts him. He's not exactly a lost soul, but he is confused on the inside despite pretending that he's not. Be kind to EVERYONE, but especially the ones that light up the world through their small actions because their smiles show that they're better at bearing the weight of their past.
I love the mannerisms of each character...it symbolizes their personality quite well. Dacron and Cooper are usually care-free and amusing, as shown in, well, every conversation. Tito Charles is caring, but protective, shown through the "harsh pat" Marco gets. Marco is lost, shown in his random behavior and inability to process his replies and concentrate on himself. Very well done, mate.
Beautifully written. This is a nice representation of that feeling when you're surrounded by people and nature, but there's a faint aura of solitude hanging around you. Yet, somehow, it doesn't feel bad, it's more of a rare bittersweet realization that not everyone is a lost soul, and even if you don't know the way, you only have to keep looking because the world is ready to guide you. I hope this makes sense. 😶
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I have been gifted with the spirit of Dacron...cuz this is just very relatable.
My mother when I say sorry after breaking the 6th expensive plate in the house.