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  • ProPug
    ProPuga year ago
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    I've read till chapter 12, and I can say that the story has a grand sense of narration to it, the grammar and vocabulary are top notch, and sometimes a bit too much considering webnovel readers aren't that great with english, but so far, I like the story! Looking forward to more updates from this author :D

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    ProPuga year ago
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    a REALLY great start to the story, and pacing is top notch, there are some rough edges like iffy grammar, but this is a really nice premise and I would love to see how the story progresses!

  • ProPug
    ProPuga year ago
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    Hey! I just finished reading 4 chapters and I have a couple things to say: Number one, this could just be me, but I think you used passive voice a bit too much, while the story has an interesting premise, I also struggled to discern character dialogues, and there were certain point in between some chapters where some descriptions broke the immersion for me, but if you correct all of those things, it's a really great story!

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    ProPuga year ago
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    oo Top Gun but in Korea

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    ProPuga year ago
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    Imo missing exclamation marks

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    ProPuga year ago
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    Ayyy aviation schooll

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  • ProPug
    ProPuga year ago
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    This work has a lot of potential, and is a little bit rough around the edges, but surely if you work on your grammar and some more active voicing, this book will soar to great heights! I also loved the way Zach was brought into the modern world, I've added this into my library and will continue reading as it updates :D

  • ProPug
    ProPuga year ago
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    Hey! I just finished reading fourteen chapters, and I must say, the book is really good! Plot and character wise, easily 9/10, there were some minor things that were off about it but not worth pointing out, Other than that, great work! I only have two suggestions: 1) try getting some sort of cover, would make it more appealing for new readers 2) Sometimes, I think you can decrease the paragraph size, because it's a bit hard to read, other than that, there's nothing else I can say about this, keep up the good work!

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    ProPuga year ago
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    That's a loaded comment coming from a high schooler lmao