this is glorified RI fanfiction

Nice idea.Too many grammatical errors, improve on what you have and it'll be a fine piece of work. Hope you keep uploading.............................

review this paragraph too much 'and' and put a full stop (.) before 'Everything.

All the maidens in the Empire had their eyes on him. He was a young married prodigy, just shy of reaching twenty-three years of age when he settled down to start a family with a mortal woman.

His father was a good man and many people knew him

ill check it out

They should do something more ant-like.Maybe clapping their mandables together to replicate clapping sounds to show they agree would be more fitting.

If you gonna make this an proper novel about ants then you should change your vocabulary.Its no longer children as that is a word that is used for humans.Brood is the name of the children of ants

The speech shall commence seems redudant.You could say that its a meeting,a council?

I got up from my half-slouched body. I think u should see the problem there. A more appropiate wording would be My half slouched body got up

ahh dont make me feel bad beans.I took the bullets out.I only shoot blanks XD

:D:D i'll work hard

I'll fix it right away

bro u scared me when i read this didnt expect you'd do it

thank you for the response beans hehehe

when I read this chapter I felt confused.Don't know if this is a result of me reading fast,my intelligence or you.You are very grammatically correct which is more than i could ever hope for on this site.I dont really get where the plot could go from this chapter.Your pacing is just fine.Didnt feel too slow or too fast. But this is just the first chapter my misgivings can alwasy be concluded by you hopefully you continue to improve on your work and keep on going. Bes of luck to you!

Shameless author review.If you got a problem with it,let it seeth in your soul and read my novel to extinguish that fire.If you are here I implore you to leave your reviews(only good ones tho XD)jkjk.Still tho please support ,give power stones,share with your friends. If you read this far Thank you!

This novel has potential if the author slows down more and puts thought into his scenes. Currently the novels feels like a speedrun which is very tiring to read.I hope u succeed in ur endevours.I gave u a five star rating because there is no use in putting down an author.Less than that will only negatively impact u.Anyway nice work hope u keep it up

An ant queen that doenst love her children is intresting.Im a still a little confused due to fast pacing.

I can feel inspiration from chrysalis,might just be my misunderstanding tho.Also what is the general setting of the story is it a cave or something?I dont know if i missed that