alexa4c

No, it is a fan service. 🙂 What you are probably referring to is a critique, but there is a big difference between a critique and readers suggestions where the story should go. Critique doesn’t tell author how they should make the story it only explains why the story or some plot elements are good or bad. And if you are wondering why is it bad for readers to suggest how story should go, well, first, readers don’t have the full grasp of the story, only author knows how they have envisioned the story, what message they want to sent (if there is any), how characters should evolve, what questions this story should raise in readers… You and I as readers we have no clue about these things. Only when the story is complete we may see that. As for this particular example, if the author saw that the story is going in this particular way, he shouldn’t have asked the readers about their opinion, he should just make it as he thinks the story should evolve.

23. She said she was 23 when she died.

Full of sugars. Better eat an orange, it has fibers along with fructose.

Hmmm, impossible. Even with less strawberries it would take much more time, unless you have big spray bottles but it would still take some time.

I grew strawberries, they are very short plants, you have to bend even if you sprinkl only leafs.

*I will ever love I think google docs has grammar check, also there are some other free tools.

@author ‘tearing lips’, ‘tearing smile’ and all the other combinations are not phrases in the English language where the meaning is releated to smiling. Lips can tear but that means you hurt you lips, there is a wound, a tear. For the context you want, lips can twitch, curl, curve… a smile can play on his lips, smile can curve his lips, it can dazzle, shine and so on… There are endless possibilities so ditch this ‘tearing’ thing. There is also a phrase ’face split into a wide smile’ , maybe this is what you wanted to say, because split and tear are synonyms.

What is banana ketchup?

How would she know, they don’t really talk?

Are the chapters shuffled? Or it only appears for me that way?