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Okay okay! This novel is nice. System genres have been going over the rankings lately, so this is good. I think there are just some "things" you need to detail out more. This just needs some grammar fixing, and intense verbs for readers to feel the book more. Over all this is fine. Keep up the good work.
I'm not lying when I say this is a good start. It's definitely good. I also enjoy the fact that there's laughter in the first chapter. Keep going. ;))
Un. Un. Nice start, limitless master piece