Amy_Roy_3075

Derek's mom being against it rings more true than this. She should trust her daughter more since they are supposed to be close.

dang! 3 years of kindergarten?

cliffhanger!!!!! arg!!! I typically don't read this genre but you got me.

It's keel over.

I just read 2 chapters of just purely made up of inner turmoil. This story needs to move. It's getting expensive with not much forward momentum.

I've read slow burns but this is the slowest. We constantly hear the bad thoughts emotions and misunderstandings. When i pay to open the next chapter to just get more of the same, I ask if I want to keep going or just read a new book. I just want you to know what it's like to read only struggle and bad thoughts. When i see how many chapters are left and how far I've gotten with only so much progress it seems daunting.

It's lava. Larva are like maggots and such.

I like the wording here. Very well written. "The night stretches on like a fragile thread..."

This is not important but if "as" is there it should be usual instead of usually. I usually ignore typos. As usual, I continue to ignore typos .

So far the story is well written. It has a nice pace and likable characters.