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They are alive!, alive I say!
Show, don't tell. Much if this story TELLS me what happened instead of SHOWING what happened.
You could easily fix the entire convo I'll show you. " So, I was looking into the Kanabi bridge mission, the one in which Obito Uchiha died. Whole doing so, I found out that you had requested to replace him. That left me curious, could you please tell me why?" Minato asked with a forlorn look. There, that gives purpose for the conversation to start. Communicates the timeline of events clearly enough for there to be 0 doubts and most importantly doesn't come off as jolly.
All you have to do is rewrite Minato dialogue to something in character, that doesn't imply the mission hasn't been concluded yet. A moment of silence where they both think back towards Obito, maybe the fourth bringing up Obitos old habit of helping old ladies or something. Anything is better than this ruinous conversation. That kills Minato character entirely
Exactly, why is he digging into that past mission and details surrounding it? Why is he doing so now? Amd why bring if up at all? Obviously it's shoehorned in. The entire purpose of the conversation is simply to try to imply to the readers that our Mc tried to "save" Obito. The problem being, that the fourth had no reason to bring up this topic. And being respectful, is not a weakness you are obviously reaching for straws. All this conversation did was 1. Insinuate the bridg mission was rather recent, which would be an AU changes very common to these type of stories. 2. Ruin Minato's character by showing absolutely 0 tact. Furthermore, you conveniently left out the end of Minato dia where he says something to the effect of " You'll get your chance to gain merits." Like a jolly Santa doing a favor as he comes off as am emotionless disrespectful a$$ hole This is why the mission having just recently left is the only option that makes sense. Because otherwise, this entire conversation makes absolutely 0 sense.
And no, I'm not going to "assume" anything is the same as in the cannon storyline. I don't know what the Mc changed, or the author changed themselves. If it's going to follow cannon at all turns we need it to actually be stated somewhere. Obviously there are already changes occurring, the problem being we the readers are left on the dark in limbo as to what changed and what has stayed the same. That's the problem with the story starting as it has.
Just from the sense of being respectful, the fourth bringing this up, to an Uchiha, in this manner is a slap in the face. It's like he laughed at the death of an Uchiha to the face of an Uchiha while not even addressing the elephant jn the room. The conversation simply doesn't fit. It needs to be completely re-written. The dialogue needs to have meaning to it as well. What was the point of Minato bringing up something that happened that long ago? From what I can tell it's shoehorned jn. It's out place entirely. There is no reason for it to have been mentioned at all.
Yeah, "just noticing" and a "while ago" both dont fit at all. And again the forths tone is completely wrong for the conversation. The entire dialogue is incorrect. The fourth is far too happy, for a man who's teams got shattered on that mission. Rin and Obito died, while leaving a scarred Kakashi even more scarred. The tome is complete off, and the conversation isn't natural at all. The fourth brings up knowing about the request which happened quite a long time ago, when he wasn't even hokage. Why does he suddenly bring it up, and act happy? This converstaion doesn't make any logical sense no matter how it's cut.
At best you are pointing out more contradictions. The entire problem stems from the Fourth's conversation with the Mc, in which he mentions how he knows he tried to be assigned to replace Obito. This conversation only makes sense if they just left on the mission. The conversation makes absolutely 0 sense otherwise. The dialogue that occurred makes no sense in any other context.
Go-ahead read it yourself. You had the current fourth hokage who wasn't even hokage when they took the mission, mentioning the mission which killed two of his students in a jovial tone. There was no solemnity, no reflection on the darkness if the mission, nor mention of Obito dieing. The way its written, obito and them just left, and as we both know it makes no sense at all.