You can read it and tell. The overly verbose language is obvious, combined with the repetitive nature. It's ai junk. Maybe it was a translator ai but either way it's junk.

Stolen story. Do not read here. Do not give stones. Do not pay to read on patreon.

This is some odd a.i edited crap. It looks good at first glance, but the story repeats itself a lot and an obvious pattern emerges. It'll be a paragraph the moves the story, the a descriptive paragraph, the ln a story paragraph then another descriptive paragraph. This doesn't stop ever. It's like a.i was asked to add descriptive paragraphs in between each real paragraph.

It doesn't fit Caucasian either. It's just cringe. That's all it ever will be.

Thus is stolen work being reposted. The story is from fanfiction and has over 300k words written and hasn't been updated since 2017. This poster is a thief stealing others work and setting up patreon to make money from the stolen story. Please do not support this story here. Instead fo to fanfiction website. The story is in the crossover section of star wars and Harry potter.

And that's the issue. Of they had been poisoned and weak, the fight could have made sense, but not like this. 4 on 1. He didn't make any "witty", or "smart" moves during the fight to even the odds. He just fought them head on and won. This feels really contrived. His fost fight should have been 1 on 1. Then the poisoned trio at the church.

This story hasn't been updated since 2017. This author is reposting stolen work of another.

Orphan trope... And Zeno? Really? That name doesn't really fit the dxd world, and certainly not in japan.

Jesus christ, the English is so bad, that I thought I was having a stroke reading this.

A chapter is a scene. If the "scene" isn't finished the chapter isn't either. The smallest chapter in all of Harry Potter was around 2500 words, the average chapter length was close to 5000. These tidbits are infuriating.

Sasuke was 7 when the massacre happened. He graduates 5 years later. Is this an au thing or something?

Ai junk.

The ages are all wrong.

Jesus christ, I can't understand this mess. Multiple paragraphs are completely wrong and make no sense. Random facts added in the middle of converstaions and internal Monolog that don't belong as well. Very low effort.

Too childish.

Way, way too contrived. I get it, you want conflict, but this isn't it bub.

While this is good, the chapters are tiny

At that point I would just write my own story. My recommendations are as follows. 1 use sapling ai grammar checker. It's totally free. 2 get grammarly, there is a free version that works on phones. Write the story with grammrly enabled, then whenever you finish a chapter, copy the text and paste it into sapling grammar checker. It will highlight anything missing, and give recommendations on what is wrong and how to fix it. once that is done copy it again and paste it wherever the story is at such as here on web novel. DO NOT USE ANY AI SUCH AS CHAT GPT. It is very obvious when it's used. Go read Chrysalis on royal road. It's a very good example of writing a story well.

It wouldnt work. I would have to add a bunch of stuff that's missing.

He tells us what happens and doesn't show us what happens.