PolarKuma

I think you are on the right track of doing better and improving, if you are this willing to hear critical reviews, and this aware of your experiences. Though I am not an expert critic or writer, and is just a seasoned reader, I am glad you chose to hear my take despite the lack of professional credibility. Goodluck to your future endeavors.

The story is good. The way the story is written is more of like a biography of the MC rather than a novel, in my opinion. The dialogues and acting scenes just exists just to further the monologue. It is not bad if you think of it as it is, since thag is also another way of portraying a story, but if you expected there to be more acting scenes or to dive deeper into the roles, then this story is not it. Like I said every interaction or scene are just a means to further the monologue and not the other way around. And I would it preferred to be the other way around since this is an Acting Story. However, that is just my opinion and personal preference tho. Now for the world builiding. I found it lacking especially in dimension and depth. Hollywood or just the movie world in paticular is very deep and diverse, it wasn't portrayed well in this story or dived deep enough. If I were to suggest references of Hollywood-type novels/stories where they might not be perfect but I personally believe has grasped the essense of Hollywood genre or Acting Stories, they would be: Legendary Actor, & Legendary Hollywood Director. Both are translated by Shallowman here in Webnovel. Now for the main character itself, I find it very hard to connect with him since he acts like a child most of the time. He has the temperament of child when actually he has the soul of an old man literally. You can ignore it most of the time, but can be cringe when you think about it sometimes how he acts like a kid when he's that grown. But that is still a personal opinion and a valid one. You can hear what you want to hear, but believe this review came from a good place and intentions.

My user there is 'Schloanruven'. Just check out the books I put a 'favorite' to in my profile. Feel free to explore there also, I can guarantee you that you can find a lot of good stories in there. The search settings are also more advanced than in this site also. So, more or less you can find the stories that are more in your preferences.

Hello. Webnovel is the last platform you would want to find stories that are up to standard. At most, only 5% of the stories here are up to par. And around 1% are the really good ones. So they are pretty rare. And if you find them, some are in hiatus or are inconsistent in updates. Me personally, my main platform for reading good stories is royal road. The authors there are way more professional in terms of skill in writing despite amateurs. But if you insist on this site, here are some of the few stories I could recommend from what I can remember. 1) The Hitting Zone (half_empty) 2) The Legendary Actor (Shallowman) 3) Legendary Hollywood Director (Shallowman) 4) Naruto: The Blind Swordsman (Veganmaster) 5) Reborn As Thor (Ghost_84) 6) Ghost of the Uchiha (T0x1n) 7) Holyjoker (This one is an author, he has a lot of really good fics) 8) MisterImmortal (This one is an author with a lot great fics too)

The idea is very sound but the execution is not up to par. Odin's character feels very off especially when the fic is written in monologue style. The way he speaks or internally process things does not fit with the character Odin. Even if he's a reincarnated one and merged with another reincarnator, it still feels off. The way he speaks and think feels more like a modern youth (childish). I think what went wrong here is that the author failed to separate himself from his MC (Odin). The MC's boons are also a problem. The MC is already a god and has meta knowledge, so the boons are very unecessary. It takes away the fun of being reincarnated since any challenge he will face will just feel forced since he already has everything. Those points and the fast pacing/wish fulfillment style doesn't help at all in the immersion to the story. It's not very immersive.

My question still stands in the previous chapter. Is the story shown here the exact version of his story on Finding Nemo, or is it just a synopsis/summary for the people who don't know the story?

I really love where this is going. I just hope when the time comes when he tortures Pantu, we won't be disappointed.

This thing suffers the same thing chinese novel and fanfiction suffers: great idea but bad execution. The only thing that got this fic a 3.2 from me is due to its great concept and update stability. I think those are the reason why this was rated highly by some aside from the spam ratings. The people from this site really love ideas with no context. Let's start with the character Design. I rated it 2 for trying. Every character is one dimensional even the MC. It's hard not to cringe at their dialogues and interaction. There's no depth at all. Even the narration and monologues are off. Its like reading a children's book. The narration and monologues feels like this; "Dugu Xin suddenly sensed murderous intent. He exlaimed 'What frightening intent.'" Redundant and badly structured. Now with the plot. I rated it 3. The plot development is passable. It could really work if not for the problem with the characters and characters interactions as I mentioned above. The plot development still follows the common style and elements the original story followed. And its okay. However, sometimes it tries too hard to copy the style of the original story and can be cringe. Simply it lacks the flavor of the author. The world background, I rated it 3. We already know most of the doulou planet. However, we also know how vast and deep it can be. It was not projected in this fic. I only gave it a 3 for the fact of the knowledge of the world I have of the original story. Otherwise, it would have been lower. Lastly for the writing quality. I gave it a 3 because it is readable. It is readable but still mediocre. The spelling errors are few and the grammar is passable. However, just I have mentioned before, it feels like reading a children's book. I feel like this problem is more on how it is structured. It's not even amateurish, it's more like the wrtiter doesn't even know what they are doing in terms of how it is structured. So, overall I rated it is a 3.2. It still passed but needs a lot of improvement.

You know what? I'll give you 5 stars just for the respect I have by being a real one. What I mean about that is that you are in the right track in becoming a decent author. Now time and experience will be the determinants if you'll become one or become something better. To clarify what I mean about being in the right track is that no systems and no incessant horny shit. While years ago the "system" themes were deemed creative, right now it has just become a pathetic excuse for uncreative writers to supplement their incompetency to write a decent plot with resources only within the materials. It has destroyed the uniqueness and originality of writers. It's all the same repeatitive bs. While it may gain them popularity now with the underaged minds in this site, it will not bring them far. Their ceiling will just be a popular amateur writer in this site provided that he/she can reach that ceiling which I really doubt, and never last enough to go beyond that or find his/her own style of writing. I hope you do stay away from that and learn & grow the hard but right way. P.S. I'll write my actual review about this fic later when it has already a decent amount of chapters. This is just an encouragement for the couple of writers who tried doing things differently from the trend of themes in this site.

Yeah it's dumbly forced. Gran Torino wouldn't ever expect that over a child, heck nobody would.