Flavio_Scavone

Why was this nuked previously?

Ah yes the Hayflick Limit... the one discovered and tested in the 60s... Bruh

Try writing one, see how It turns out, and make sure to put It in it's own chapter, so that people can skip It if they wish

You are correct, plenty of unforgivable criminals live in Zaun, I don't understand why he didn't just kill them instead, It wouldn't be the first time he killed someone, and they wouldn't be innocent either

Bro what

The story has been nice so far, but I think you should try to separate slice of life and action you know. It felt really odd having a jjk mission in the middle of a date, and now his grandpa Is calling him again while he Is relaxing. It feels like the various scenes of the story don't have time to 'breathe' if you get what I mean. This doesn't mean that you should never make action intersect with slice of life, but him being called twice during a date, almost one chapter after the other feels a bit much, but I get why you are doing this, the only reason the original Kuze and Alya weren't together at the star was because of his insecurities, and Ryan with his confidence would basically speedrun the relationship if he wasn't interruputed Sorry for the wall of text😅

This entire thing just reeks of ChatGPT

Did you even read the story bro😭😭

Great, can't wait for the slice of life and romance to actually start, just make sure you don't burnout posting 2 chapters a day

I think they should have some doubts, not a full blown reveal however, It's too early