T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach
I have read ALOT of web novels, so now I'm trying to write some
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T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach2 years agoPublicado porHaven't read it just wanted to let people know the character on the cover is the pulse blade pilot from Titanfall/Titanfall 2 Play the game plz!
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach2 years agorespondió a AWESOME_01
same
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agorespondió a Daoist37
thank you I was getting annoyed with all the "retard" comments.
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agoComentado por
lit
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agorespondió a MynameJeff
Is there anyway I can talk to you?
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agoPublicado por
Worldbuilding is pretty good, But my main problem is I hate the mc because sounds like a predator when talking about his 10-year-old sister. It's decently funny and enjoyable to read.
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agoPublicado por
The main criticism I can make is its Waaaaaaaaay too rushed and I don't think the author understands the show don't tell rule. the author needs to slow down and SHOW me how his father was a good man not tell me. all the small things the MC mentions his dad did for him in that list the author needs to expand on them by giving them scenes. I know that is hard to do but it will make his death so much more impactful.
- T1me_2_Dr1nkBl3ach3 years agoPublicado por
just doing this so mabe someone will read it. did hhhhhhgfdddddfyuiiikjbfccvvbnjjjjyffggj<>iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiikkkkkkk jo k jk
