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Hmm seems like I can’t remember why I am still alive
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I didn’t want to leave a comment but I guess I have to. There are many people that go into these dungeons, the main way to beat the dungeon? JUMP THE ABSOLUTE F*** OUT OF THEM!
I love this review, that’s really all I can say. I don’t have time to write a paragraph or three so I’ll just address the issues. 1. The grammatical issues: I am human and can’t catch all of the issues that are there. I do check my work but there are times that I fail to find issues. If you see any issues then by all means leave a comment that points it out. 2. The HP Values: I was thinking of having it like this: [Damage Taken (Max HP)]. Aka [-100 (800)] So that you know how much HP is left instead of having to do math yourself. 3. Chapter 8-11 have many switches in time and place. This was due to me setting something up but I understand how that can get confusing. If I am going to go back in time then I’ll try and do it in a way that has a character explain it. It’ll be a POV switch but as a retelling from that character. 4. Dust as a character is kept vague until he truly reveals himself. I’ll explain his backstory in a certain… chapter. It’ll go more in-depth into his character and his feelings. 5. Upload schedule: It’s hard to say this due to the way I have to re-write certain parts but I’ll try and keep it to a chapter every 2-3 days at minimum. I just need to get back into my flow. This was done on my phone so please excuse the massive amount of grammar mistakes. I’ll try and explain the world more as we go along. It is only chapter 14 and the main character hasn’t even left the dungeon so please be patient and continue reading this story.
Author I give you props for this, he’s giving them all these special treatments due to the fact people from their neck of the woods will be there to pick them up. It’s quite easy to see as he knows they’ll come just due to the fact that the counter attack hasn’t happened yet. By cultivating favor among the women, those women will tell the soldiers or army coming to get them that they’re not bad people and allow their relations to grow which may spark trade. This ties into them not wanting to look weak as if they were too weak then the army would rather get rid of them than trade with them. I’m half asleep reading this but when I saw this part I awoke a bit.
I would equal it to being surprised that ants can float by grabbing each other and forming a small ball on the water. Of course as a human we are way smarter and better than them but sometimes we are awed by the small things. Ants live such short lives but get things done so efficiently.
Wasn’t going to leave a comment but this is exactly what Sukuna did 😭
Thanks, I’m writing a bunch of new background information for the world and it’s races. That’s why chapters may come out late as I make something and then rewrite it to put more effort into it. If I can’t read this story and enjoy it then how could anyone else? I really want to have every character be defined and have their own chance to shine. The next ten to fifteen chapter starting from chapter 13 are going to be absolute heat.
The Onos:
The Fade:
The Lerk:
Dwarf hippopotamus with Down syndrome… The Gorge:
The Skulk:
Yeah, I’ll post the reference pictures for all of the aliens in the comments where their name status is.
Who knows. I will say volume one of the story was meant to be read then people should have started reading the other stories. Then read volume 2, it would make way more sense that way.