Could you please slow down the story a bit, I personally think it would be more enjoyable if you give Arthur and Renner more interactions, instead of focusing so much on progressing the story.

Your sword isn’t actually that strong in real world terms. I’m pretty sure in the real world the strongest enchantment would be knockback. Since throwing your opponent 5 to 10 meters backwards probably make them stumble and lie down on the ground, they will probably even break bones. If you have fire aspect they will even burn to ashes While lying on the ground in capable of moving.

Why isn’t she using pain choice

Why is nobody using the strongest card in the game, “painful choice!” after all it isn’t banned.

How is chaos not number one

Why is that always needs to be a self insert MC from earth who died, and got transferred to another world, where they finally acquire the power of an anime character. Why couldn’t we just take the anime character over to the other world. How come that the Aizen from earth memorys overwrites the one from Naruto, but the original Aizen doesn’t override the self insert protagonist from earth.

How come that Percy is the worst dark souls gamer in history. Having 600 deaths in a single run of any soul game, is horrendous. I had about 80 to 90 deaths in dark souls 3, which is my first dark souls game run experienced. and I am not Percy Jackson. Percy would probably be able to complete all the souls games without dying once.

Bro, spiders has eight legs. Not 6

He made the skill cool-down less than a min, so as long he activated the skill before the skill effect runs out, he will be able to touch her continuously.

Best villain in yugioh is Dartz

It is a fine bleach fanfic. My main issue is that the riding gets worse and worse with each chapter.

Great story you have based you fanfic on, but it sad that they are no one who has translated the last 150 except MTL. I hope you don’t stop riding on this story

Sadly dark souls will be impossible to make, because of how he has structure of the rules of game making, which makes it impossible for a monster to one shot the player, and at the same time have an insanely high health pool. And that’s because the player and the monster/boss must be at the same level as the player.

How many cp is ?

The story is rather average in riding quality, update stability and world background. However he makes a perfect character, there is a yandere and then he just decides to kill her. The most interesting character he has built was kill with no real purpose behind it. All other characters in the story is boring and their character development sucks. The world development is just Bad, there’s nothing special about the world he’s trying to build compared to other stores you could read the only time he had something unique was with the yandere that was kill

Why need for speed, GT is the better game

The story has a fine plot, and I really like the idea of making a kingdom. But there is no greater character development nor any great Emotional attachments to any of the characters. About the grammar, I am a person who can read MTL and live with it. But the way the author never use she or her and instead only uses he or His. Is the most obvious and annoying grammar errors in the story.

Either just go with one or go with one from Harry Potter and Marvel. The reason why I don’t want them to be too many, It’s because you can give them more personality and I’m tired of harems with shallow characters.

There are more chapters why do you not translate them. And I am talking about 60 more chapters there is all machine translated It’s an extremely nice story that I follow from the start just forgot to give a review