DaoistglcrYM

Great So Far, if it doesn't take a wrong turn like other novels this review stays.

Nice Fight Scene.

A decent concept in the story so far, but every time it gets a bit interesting it gets ruined by an annoying thing. I like the concept of the sword and dual cultivation and his low-key approach to it, but the story and characters are things I dislike. The denseness about making love (seriously?) a servent/low person in the biggest cultivation family doesn't know about it? How quickly does he fall for the sect girl he meets and ends up explaining everything to her, so much for low-key, then there is the rather stupid girl spirit talking about her husband every other line she has... Why is she even there and this gives all the signs I don't want to see in a dual cultivating novel (another dual cultivating MC. ) His naiveness about everything becomes kinda annoying to show a reason for the spirit girl character to be in the book, she is not needed and only makes the story stale, she also makes MC look stupid and lost. Why should he even trust her and listen to her and what is her role in the story? What made me stop was that even the next potential lover would be someone who had already enjoyed being with everyone in the town if not the whole country and will always be interested in finding more. I doubt I will like her either, so while there is an interesting concept here, it does not have interesting characters for me. What I would have been interested in, 1- His devil side 2- Swords and skills about that and his bloodlines powers etc 3- Side character/ lovers who matter to his story (not some other dual cultivations wife and some lady who enjoys being with everyone on town) 4- A more solid character development (now he is portrayed as Naive one second (So some of the irrelevant side characters could have a reason for existing) and partially smart/wise when the side characters are not needed) 5- A much much better reason for the sect girl to like him and accept him being a devil. 6 - etc... Overall the concept got me interested in the story, but the characters made me dislike it. I would suggest that to new readers, you try reading it yourself to make a decision, but for me, I think I will stop it a third of the way. Writing Quality - 4 Stability of Updates - 5 Story Development - 3 Character Design - 1 World Background - 3 The total score - 3.2

The story is going well and good to see the introduction of a character that is not serious. It was a good addition, as for the website I think it is good and since I can't afford to pay for your patron, I would happily contribute by seeing ads on the sides when you add them. I recommend that you continue to update WN and SH on regular basis just keep it 1-10 chapters behind, this way you will still get more viewers, and ranks on the site will advertise for you;

An above-average story, the writing quality is ok with missing commas, uncapitalized names, and a few awkward sentences. But not really a big drawback. The updates are constant, the story itself is good and holds a lot of potential. It also has decent world-building. The problem is mostly with the character design, they all seem to lack maturity and there are a lot of dumb moves by the MC (considering his age (35) at both life he should have higher maturity.) He acts like a new teen, here are a few instances I remember. (spoilers ahead) At the start of the story, he sees a woman in danger and goes ahead fighting the people taking her without even understanding his situation or if it could affect him or his family negatively. It would make more sense if he had some time in this world to understand whether his action means the death of his family. But that isn't really something you can fault him with too much, but what makes one annoyed is that later even after he is warned he had made enmity against a big force he doesn't bother to understand what he has done. (Of course, this bites him back) A day later he takes an arrow for the same woman he has just met, he is poisoned with incurable poison. Once his cheat solves his problem, his response for how he got healed is, "I don't know", which makes his grandfather more interested in finding out. Leading to the next problem. Anyway, this "grown" person later meets a very powerful cultivator and starts arguing with her because she calls him a kid. How he shows his maturity is by shouting, "I have a dual cultivating partner so I am not a kid." Later when she doesn't call him a kid, "I am so happy she didn't call me a kid when she spoke this time." You get more examples of him and others that act rather immature, these actions/dialogues and few grammar mistakes take away from the story. Even with all of this, it is still worth a read. Writing Quality - 3 Stability of Updates - 5 Story Development - 4 Character Design - 2 World Background - 4 The total score 3.6

The Writing quality is good, and the world-building is also good but the character design and story development need much work. The characters most of the time doubting their actions, then as soon as something happens they go in a self-blame mood and then to the I will sacrifice myself mode. From a rather interesting start, it slowly shifts towards the Japanese anime/manga style of characters (the indecisive, self-blaming, beta-ish kind). This not only ruins the characters that take turns to blame themselves for each part of the plot but also the story takes a great hit each time with their rather annoying self-talk. The story would be much better if about 50 percent of the MC's and other characters' self-talk is just removed, cuz now all you get is plot points immediately followed by the next character blames themself for this part of the story. Writing Quality - 5 Stability of Updates - 4 Story Development - 2 Character Design - 1 World Background - 4 The total score - 3.2

I personally want to see some more chapters before premium. But also there are never enough free chapters.

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The story is great, especially the balance between the fight and interaction and everything else. It is an enjoyable read just as it is. The witches and their wildly different characteristics were a great addition for me, I would like it more if they sometimes interpreted orders their own way and bring some chaos in the planned moves. Otherwise good story and pacing, keep it up!

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