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I know about her it's not that I don't know these characters it's that I don't know their names as soon as you give even basic description of what they did in the original I'm like oh that's that one but oftentimes you never really do that that's why it's confusing and don't forget there are also people which have never seen or read Demon Slayer
you forgot his fiance you made it like a big surprise you said her name (like I'm supposed to remember who that) is and then give us no other information for like three chapters I was so confused that entire time not to mention all of those other people you mentioned I mean one is excusable that's an accident but when you've done it to so many that's a problem when you first introduce a Canon character to a fanfiction even if it is the main character you give their name and what their role is in the original story for those who may have not watched or read that story or in my and many other people's case people who really really suck at names
there's a really annoying problem where the main character will act surprised and be like oh that's (insert random character name) and expect everyone to know who that is I'm absolutely horrible with names so even though I've watched Demon Slayer it'll leave me super confused like it will just name drop a character and give no further information of who that character was and what they did in the original story
hey can you tell me when this Arc will end I hate the premise of the Ark so very much so if you could tell me what chapter it ends and what important stuff I'll be missing cuz I can't tell from the names of the chapter's
can I get an update on how to rewrite is going
there are too many chapters where he's a child I do understand they're setting up for future progression but that is not what I was advertised in this book so even though it is setting up every chapter I have to go through that is not what was a mobster in a magical world it is extremely annoying and not to mention they're not even the slightest bit entertaining on top of that so it is quite literally impossible for me to get to the part I might enjoy because there's just so much uninteraining chapters if they were fewer or better quality it would be much better
so you're saying to even get to the main story you have to read over 50 chapters spend over 280 coins you realize how ridiculous that is and it's not to mention how much time it will take to get to that point what percentage of people that try reading your book come close to that point in the story not trying to be rude but I don't see any logic in the way you set this up
I understand what you were trying to do with the first chapter but you managed ruin the book in the first chapter it's not anything horrendous but after a info dump type opening you tried to make me feel sympathy for these two characters and you failed inside of feeling sympathy for what these two children are going through it gave me a very oh really this is how your going start off your story type of vibe so instead of feeling sympathy for any of these characters I was just rolling my eyes at every third sentence and I can't pinpoint what was so bad the grammar was fine and it's too early in the story for any potholes or writing mistakes but it just really made me dislike your book but you got a lot of free chapters I won't be reading them but I like that you did that so two and a half Stars