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MediocreSkater

MediocreSkater

Lv13
2020-05-12 Se unióCanada
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater16d
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    After all, I had Paul's genes in my blood and a cute face, and that mixed with my magical prowess was sure to net me some girls once I was older. Just need to find one that's thirteen or so, and they'd be right in my strike range.
    Leon Greyrat: The Second Son - Mushoku Tensei OC - OmegaLul1234
    Cómic · DBoblivion
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    MediocreSkater16d
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    She was a beautiful woman with violet-purple eyes and reddish-brown hair that she tied up in a half bun, with hair strands resting on either side of her shoulders, much like Mama's hairstyle. She also had a slender and voluptuous body and wore oval-shaped glasses and a maid outfit.
    Leon Greyrat: The Second Son - Mushoku Tensei OC - OmegaLul1234
    Cómic · DBoblivion
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater29d
    respondió a Camilo_S

    Yea but it felt that it could be complete after the first volume but this chapter basically went against you built in this novel, saying he didn't belong there despite how many connections he made there. But other than that it was cool to see an mlp novel. If you ever plan on rewriting here is my advice. Spend less time on the characters describing how they feel and let it flow organically. The book felt very summarized and rushed, take time to go over important events and time skips unimportant ones I don't mind the romance but it would have been more interesting imo if it played out longer You can try to spend more time describing the magic system and add your own touch and how it could work. I do like the character development of the MC and a few self reflective moments he has. Referencing to the previous point of how all characters describe their feelings it all feels artificial and repeated, did you use AI to help you write this? Instead try to convey emotions with more subtle dialogue and some introspection for key moments, maybe a pov change to switch things up? I haven't seen mlp in a very long time with my sister so I was pretty surprised to see a fic here, I hope you don't give up and try rewriting! Btw if you have lack of creativity issues you can consider switching the direction of the storyline where the mc focuses mostly on magical research and only intervenes in key moments and sprinkle in some slice of life. You can read various magic based novels and come up with a system that matches the MLP background, with this there is a lot of inspiration to go off of. Good luck 👍

    Ch 35 **Chapter 35: The Unexpected Error**
    my new life of magic (COMPLETED)
    TV · Camilo_S
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater29d
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    If you wanted to end it, why like this? Should have left it be at the end of volume one and take your time further along the line

    Ch 35 **Chapter 35: The Unexpected Error**
    my new life of magic (COMPLETED)
    TV · Camilo_S
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater29d
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    Since when did he become an alicorn?

    "I feel the same way, Twilight," I replied, wrapping a wing around her. "We've come a long way, and I'm excited to see what the future holds for us."
    my new life of magic (COMPLETED)
    TV · Camilo_S
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater29d
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    What about the cutie mark, I thought Twilight gets it at the entrance exam trying to hatch spike

    Ch 6 Chapter 6: Bonds and New Beginnings
    my new life of magic (COMPLETED)
    TV · Camilo_S
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a Orion_Art

    Is the whole timeline really a year? That's a lot shorter than I thought, how does Bell level that much that fast 😂

    Unfortunately, the Thranduil of that time had been too busy chasing cures for his condition to know the exact date it happened. All I knew was that it happened anywhere from one to three decades ago, giving me a 20 year time span that I could be in, 18 being before canon and two being after. I would personally prefer to have some time before canon to get set up, so I was hoping I wasn't currently in the latter two years. To figure this out, I figured that the banquet my father was holding tonight would be the perfect place to find out.
    A Tensura Elf in Danmachi
    Cómic · SleepySailor
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a Immortal_Lord

    Yea the original is 我以奥术登临神座 with 387 chapters still updating

    Este párrafo ha sido eliminado.
    Ascension To Divine Throne
    Fantasía · Lazy_Pen_Master
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
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    Oh he's cooked

    'Let's see…. I think I remember they are called…. Horses?'
    Primordial Expanse: I have the Strongest Talent!
    Fantasía · TheUngod
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a JPNovelFan

    Or too weak since the power depends on technology

    "I know you favor the halberd, so your spirit manifestation will most likely be that of the spirits that favor the halberd as well. The most popular being fire and metal spirits for halberd users. The rarer elements of Light and Dark are also a possibility considering your father's proficiency with his eternal Fire spirit. Whatever spirit you awaken tomorrow, make sure you listen well to the Iron Marquis' instructions to memorize your family's fighting techniques as a basis for the halberd arts you create. They are well balanced and you've trained well these last three years. However, you can never forget the basics as they will be the best foundation for your future killing techniques." He stated.
    Spirit’s Awakening: The Path of Lightning and Water
    Fantasía · JPNovelFan
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a JPNovelFan

    Does it fluctuate based on strength? Or is everyone, either the weakest commoner or the most powerful being all live 10000 years

    With a flourish of the door's opening, in walked a scholarly gentleman, Sir Ian. He was a man that looked to be about 60 years old. In reality, he was already 8,000 years old as the average life expectancy in the world of Nexaria is 10,000 years.
    Spirit’s Awakening: The Path of Lightning and Water
    Fantasía · JPNovelFan
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
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    Have you considered that it could be yourself?

    Lu Yang didn't pay them any mind. He hadn't heard any such noises on Sky Gate Mountain, so he continued looking for a task.
    Who Let Him Cultivate?!
    Oriental · The Whitest Crow
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a Malyari_Makisig

    It's this thing

    Lin Xiao smacked his lips as he looked at another racial interface:
    The Era of Gods
    Ciencia y ficción · Become a Taoist Overnight
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a Lazy_Pen_Master

    Well I read this first using mtl so I was wondering why you didn't keep the talent as Almighty in the raw

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    Ascension To Divine Throne
    Fantasía · Lazy_Pen_Master
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater1mth
    respondió a Lazy_Pen_Master

    I remember it was Almighty in the mtl which sounded a lot cooler tbh

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    Ascension To Divine Throne
    Fantasía · Lazy_Pen_Master
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater2mth
    respondió a Deippy_Deippy

    Have you read yuan tianzun, definition of gas

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    I Became An Immortal On Mortal Realm
    Oriental · Let me laugh
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater2mth
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    Wasn't a fusion of personalities? Why does it sound like he was possessed? And I think that the original should be the more dominant personality due to his longer life

    It was the same with his mannerisms and movements, too. I found myself moving more gracefully and with more coordination in this body than I had been previously. There were no wasted movements when I moved, and my body didn't even twitch during long periods of inaction. On top of that, I also found formal etiquette instinctual and easy to maintain and my posture remained immaculate no matter if I was thinking about it or not. These were just some of the small passive benefits I gained from inhabiting this body.
    A Tensura Elf in Danmachi
    Cómic · SleepySailor
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater2mth
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    I feel like his elf personality should have been the most dominant since he lived for 70 years and the consciousness from earth was only a fragment

    I had no such prejudice since I came from an outside perspective, but the vast majority of Elves looked down upon the other races. Even the milder Elves, like the members of my family, still found any non-elf distasteful to be around. I found the practice inane but found no reason to comment on it since I would be met with disagreement, and I didn't really care to change anyone's mind. I planned to leave the forest in a few years anyway. 
    A Tensura Elf in Danmachi
    Cómic · SleepySailor
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater2mth
    respondió a Vatsal_06

    That's what I'm thinking, he seems to attach a lot of importance to the plot when in reality if he secludes himself for even a few decades with his growth rate he'd probably be a top powerhouse, then it'd be safer to go out and play

    Ch 3 Planning and Goal Setting
    A Tensura Elf in Danmachi
    Cómic · SleepySailor
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  • MediocreSkater
    MediocreSkater2mth
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    Well does it matter when Cannon starts to him? He has all the resources he needs and Cannon starting is just Bell's journey to being stronger.

    Unfortunately, the Thranduil of that time had been too busy chasing cures for his condition to know the exact date it happened. All I knew was that it happened anywhere from one to three decades ago, giving me a 20 year time span that I could be in, 18 being before canon and two being after. I would personally prefer to have some time before canon to get set up, so I was hoping I wasn't currently in the latter two years. To figure this out, I figured that the banquet my father was holding tonight would be the perfect place to find out.
    A Tensura Elf in Danmachi
    Cómic · SleepySailor
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