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Yea but it felt that it could be complete after the first volume but this chapter basically went against you built in this novel, saying he didn't belong there despite how many connections he made there. But other than that it was cool to see an mlp novel. If you ever plan on rewriting here is my advice. Spend less time on the characters describing how they feel and let it flow organically. The book felt very summarized and rushed, take time to go over important events and time skips unimportant ones I don't mind the romance but it would have been more interesting imo if it played out longer You can try to spend more time describing the magic system and add your own touch and how it could work. I do like the character development of the MC and a few self reflective moments he has. Referencing to the previous point of how all characters describe their feelings it all feels artificial and repeated, did you use AI to help you write this? Instead try to convey emotions with more subtle dialogue and some introspection for key moments, maybe a pov change to switch things up? I haven't seen mlp in a very long time with my sister so I was pretty surprised to see a fic here, I hope you don't give up and try rewriting! Btw if you have lack of creativity issues you can consider switching the direction of the storyline where the mc focuses mostly on magical research and only intervenes in key moments and sprinkle in some slice of life. You can read various magic based novels and come up with a system that matches the MLP background, with this there is a lot of inspiration to go off of. Good luck 👍
Since when did he become an alicorn?
Is the whole timeline really a year? That's a lot shorter than I thought, how does Bell level that much that fast 😂
Yea the original is 我以奥术登临神座 with 387 chapters still updating
Oh he's cooked
Or too weak since the power depends on technology
Does it fluctuate based on strength? Or is everyone, either the weakest commoner or the most powerful being all live 10000 years
Have you considered that it could be yourself?
It's this thing
Well I read this first using mtl so I was wondering why you didn't keep the talent as Almighty in the raw
I remember it was Almighty in the mtl which sounded a lot cooler tbh
Have you read yuan tianzun, definition of gas
Wasn't a fusion of personalities? Why does it sound like he was possessed? And I think that the original should be the more dominant personality due to his longer life
I feel like his elf personality should have been the most dominant since he lived for 70 years and the consciousness from earth was only a fragment
That's what I'm thinking, he seems to attach a lot of importance to the plot when in reality if he secludes himself for even a few decades with his growth rate he'd probably be a top powerhouse, then it'd be safer to go out and play
Well does it matter when Cannon starts to him? He has all the resources he needs and Cannon starting is just Bell's journey to being stronger.