Zhoa_Fei
I am a fledgling author that specializes in Fantasy, Isekai and Shounen writing. Since I am relatively new to this website, then I look to hone my craft. I urge anyone to try out my flagship series.
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This is a solid way to start up an isekai story. It encompasses a goal and an understanding of our leading characters. I am curious about what type of people they will turn into as the story progresses. What threats will they encounter? I am dying to find out.
This book overall is rather solid. it does require some knowledge of the cultivation genre to pick up certain aspects, but the style is relatively easy to understand. It could be better at flushing out the characters as things progress. The writing quality is a big plus for this one, and the world in itself is rather creative in my eyes. I'm curious about what kind of characters and story will ultimately come out of this one. This one is worthy of occasional revists.
One bad thing I will point out is how insignificant a lot of these scenes seem to be. The chapters jump from place to place with little semblance of importance to the actions thus far. This is a byproduct of the chapter ls being too small and lacking of content.
A solid chapter is a good thing. It isn't bad, but it could use some work. Overall, it gets the job done when it comes to publishing on webnovel. Webnovel recommends smaller chapters, but you don't want to keep cutting and jumping scenes. In reality, a lot of the smaller chapters would be much better in a longer chapter.
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I'm glad that you caught that. Ever since they updated the mobile app, my editing process has been flawed, and minor mistakes like that slip through. If you manage to catch any others, then pointing them out would be helpful. I'll try to find a way to better proofread and edit away many of the mistakes.
This section could use some cleaning up for greater effect.