Henry_Hyren

Pros: The story is indeed good and enjoyable, I very much liked it. The characters have their own uniqueness which mixes well with the whole story. The only thing I can say for the opposite is that, indeed, the grammar is correct but it's a bit... rough? The sentences have too many pronouns or nouns. For example, the I's in every beginning of the sentences, but as the story goes on, it becomes better. I'm loving the book more and more, I hope you keep writing 😊

Omg! someone finally noticed the tags😆 I've been waiting. Thanks for the praises, I'll try to update more in the future

Games are not my cup of tea, but this sure is! The first few chapters gives you the general idea of the author's capabilities in terms of writing and behold! She's a master. Everything's perfect, even the flow of the story and also the interactions. The character and plot advancements are also well made, I hope to see more

no 😭🤣 but I know they're not the greatest. I just patched up some words together, and some doesn't have meaning. But others do and they can give a little spoiler

Thanks, I've found that my characters need more improvement, but I've paid attention to their names so you should definitely check it out

Thank you very much for truthfully informing me of things I need to improve on. Your honest opinion is really inspiring me to become a better author. I'll pay more attention to them.

i'll keep that in mind, it's really helpful since i have a hard time at those, thanks again

thanks, i plan on expanding more on the plot later on. I'm glad that you find it satisfactory

Reading this at night is really something, but the words convey the right feelings and emotions. It makes the reader curious and expectant, while also scared, in the first few chapters. It's a novel with great emotion so I would definitely recommend it. And comment on the cover: Gotta agree, haha.

😔 I'll reluctantly let him go UwU