Great_maid_Oni

Man, I couldn’t even finish reading this chapter. The dialogues are confusing, and it’s just exhausting to follow. Like the other guy said, it feels like there’s heavy AI usage here—the text reads really weird.

That ended up being really confusing.

Man, we’ve got a few mistakes here in Rhaella’s part, she’s calling Jaehaerys and Shaera her uncles when they’re actually her parents, and she’s also calling Vaegon her cousin when he should be her brother… Unless you’ve restructured their family tree. thx for chap

Do you plan to follow the story on "Archive of Our Own" 100%, or are you going to change it? thx for chap

thx for chap

Not sure if this idea would work for you, but I saw something similar in another story once, and I thought it was pretty interesting… You could use the Dragonkeepers to turn them into a professional, private army for the Targs. By tradition, they already answer only to the royal family, speak Valyrian, and have always taken care of the dragons. You could justify it with a reform in the administrative structure, expanding their numbers and funding while disguising it as something normal with a different purpose—when, in reality, you’re building this small army. I’m mentioning this because the Gold Cloaks already have to focus on keeping order in the city, plus they’re kind of obvious and always under watch by others. And if the Kingsguard suddenly gets a big increase in numbers, it’ll definitely raise suspicions… thx for chap

True, I forgot it’s the father who picks the names.

Dara just seems like a shortened version of Daranne’s name, what a lazy mom when it comes to picking names…