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You copy pasted the wrong part
This is the wrong story
Honestly, I like the plot and story. The mysterious abilities of the main character being revealed as the chapters goes on is a nice touch. So far it seems like the mc’s powers are op, but hard to control. Leaves me thinking. However, the pacing of the story is irritating. The sports festival started chapter 6, and in chapter 14, the first obstacle race isn’t even done yet. Each chapter is fluff with barely anything actually happening. One entire chapter spent talking about how someone did something or surprised the others. The next chapter wasted talking about the next move. Please work on progressing the story faster with chapters of actual value.
All your books are being deleted. The one you posted a review on 24h ago got deleted too. Are you on another site too?
He can’t see the beast approaching and surrounding the city? He can’t leave once he notices them? He can’t just look up Black Vatican and go, “Oh, they’re coming to the city. I should leave now before they get here?”
I don’t mind the choice, but why is the MC always caught off guard and always late? With his map, why doesn’t he give the warning and leave sooner? It’s always annoying.
Electromagnetic weapons will never be viable until they figure out how to maintain the weapon past a couple shots. Each shot destroys the weapon. It’s so strong it tears itself apart. The US Navy canceled the project because they can achieve the same result with a different, cheaper alternative.
Toru is such a beauty when not invisible
Your system is pretty minimalist, so I like it. Continue as you had.