GifflarGod
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GifflarGod2mthComentado porCh 38 An Intense Rush of Emotions- GifflarGod2mthrespondió a Sphire1707
Sorry english is my second language.. i forgot boarding meant that.. Boarding always stuck to me meaning boarding a plane😅
This contract would entail that they would take care of all his basic needs which included boarding, feeding, and training. - GifflarGod2mthrespondió a Sphire1707
Okay.. I was hoping actually that you would pick Barca as we all know they are far past their Golden age and mc could lead the team back to their golden age and beyond
Despite the Portuguese top-flight league not being one of the top five leagues in the world, FC Porto itself was a top-flight team that could rank quite highly among the top 50 clubs in the world. - GifflarGod2mthrespondió a Sphire1707
I understand this and I too read some chapters of that novel and I think that novel went too far away from the main theme of the novel, which is football. Still focusing on his training and school for a while wouldn't be bad as we would learn more of what kind of person mc is
Since then, it had been eleven years and finally, he couldn't hold in the urge to not play on a big field with a crowd. - GifflarGod3mthComentado porShe continued moving slowly towards him, her hips now swaying seductively before trying to ask him another question and keep the conversation going, but Jason already caught on to what was going on and quickly interrupted her because he was not having it.
- GifflarGod3mthComentado por
please no romance right away..
She had a brighter shade of blonde hair than Mylo and had slightly above-average curves. It was not enough for her to be classified as thick, but she wasn't a washing board either and looked quite sexy. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
what about living place?
This contract would entail that they would take care of all his basic needs which included boarding, feeding, and training. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
had to check and indeed it ended 2-0
Jason watched the match till it ended before he stood up from the sofa feeling hungry once again, so he got into the kitchen and quickly displayed the experience of someone who had learned how to cook food in various countries for all the twenty-one years of his career. - GifflarGod3mthrespondió a Sphire1707
Then change "or" to "and" and erase "almost"
Este párrafo ha sido eliminado. - GifflarGod3mthrespondió a Sphire1707
so we gonna see Bruce wayne on a pitch later? seriously?
"... James Bond, Bruce Wayne, and Jason Bolu," After calling eleven names, Luke finally stopped calling names. - GifflarGod3mthrespondió a Sphire1707
Well idk.. nowadays i see a lot of sports novels where they just timeskip everything... slow start would be better on a long run
Since then, it had been eleven years and finally, he couldn't hold in the urge to not play on a big field with a crowd. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
gotta ask if you are fan of Barca or Real Madrid? I have a feeling you will put mc on on of them..
Despite the Portuguese top-flight league not being one of the top five leagues in the world, FC Porto itself was a top-flight team that could rank quite highly among the top 50 clubs in the world. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
yap yap
Jason didn't know about other people, but he could smell bullshit, a heavy stink of bullshit, after all, if so many foods were dangerous for people's health, then humanity as well as probably every other life on earth would have been extinct by now. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
for some reason I hear them speak in british accent in my head..
"Yeah man, mad pass," Nico said arriving as well and doing a high five with Jason as well. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
Team B to attack*
They started to move forward slowly into the opponent's half and even began doing some skill moves and going around team C's forwards, but even after a few more minutes team C still hadn't opened any space as they patiently waited for team A to attack. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
useless yap yap
Jason doubted that the Jesse Owens stadium had that many showers and since he wasn't planning to share a bathroom with any other human being that had a p*nis between their legs. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
too much useless thoughts shown and many important parts are left out..
'Hopefully, I don't get terrible teammates,' he sighed as they arrived at the tracks. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por
using these names really show you haven't put enough thought into the writing
"... James Bond, Bruce Wayne, and Jason Bolu," After calling eleven names, Luke finally stopped calling names. - GifflarGod3mthComentado por"... James Bond, Bruce Wayne, and Jason Bolu," After calling eleven names, Luke finally stopped calling names.
- GifflarGod3mthrespondió a I_am_truck_kun
Well as a one off character sure but if they will become part of the cast then it would just be weird
"... James Bond, Bruce Wayne, and Jason Bolu," After calling eleven names, Luke finally stopped calling names.