DesolateRipper
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DesolateRipper11hPublicado por- DesolateRipper30dComentado por
he's not a villain for no reason
"Their looks and figures are quite impressive. But as a shut-in, I despise those show-off boys who spend their days flaunting muscles and playing basketball. And these guys even look so handsome!" Alex muttered a curse under his breath, then turned his gaze away, showing no intention of helping them. - DesolateRipper30dComentado por
anything's a castle if you believe it in your heart, but this is probably the wrong type of Novel for that haha....
Why should he risk his life for a woman who might not be pure? Disdainfully, Alex pulled the curtains shut and dressed himself. He told Li Wan Ning and Shen Tingting, "Pack up the useful things in this dormitory for me, then I'll take you to my castle." - DesolateRipper30drespondió a Imaqtpatootie
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"Who says men have to save women? He's not your boyfriend! Let's just think of a way out ourselves, Xiao Ting," the tall girl said firmly, shaking her head. She bit her lip and took one last look at Alex before preparing to close the window. - DesolateRipper30dComentado por
They have the mindset of a disaster victim which would be fine in anything other than an apocalyptic situation.
The petite girl among them, tears streaming down her face, complained bitterly, "Humph! Are all the boys now so cowardly? Even if he doesn't come to save us, he could at least bring us some food and water! Look at all the food and water he has!" - DesolateRipper30drespondió a Mahyar_gg
beer is almost a meal in it's own right, you'd be surprised
Pulling out a bottle of beer from his spatial bag, Alex gulped down several mouthfuls, taking deep breaths to calm himself. - DesolateRipper30dComentado porAs the system's voice faded away, a long-handled machete wreathed in ghostly flames and an ordinary-looking black cloth bag appeared in front of Alex.
- DesolateRipper30drespondió a LightLeluciousKilling over a dozen, he had done enough!
- DesolateRipper1mthrespondió a Xcalibur_Xc
your level of skill as a non native speaker is already impressive, so keep your chin up.
"Why not? You are different from the others in our class. I mean in a good way that is. You are direct and you don't hesitate to speak what's in your mind. I find that pretty cool and refreshing." - DesolateRipper1mthrespondió a
your level of skill as a non native speaker is already impressive
"Why not? You are different from the others in our class. I mean in a good way that is. You are direct and you don't hesitate to speak what's in your mind. I find that pretty cool and refreshing." - DesolateRipper1mthComentado por
you should use more contractions, it would really benefit this FF and anything else you write. I'm, You're, I'll, will really help the flow, it can be a bit jarring the way it is now. an example would be like " I am sure it will be fine" vs " I'm sure it will be fine" or even " I'm sure it'll be fine" it can change the tone or even make the dialogue flow more smoothly and naturally
"Why not? You are different from the others in our class. I mean in a good way that is. You are direct and you don't hesitate to speak what's in your mind. I find that pretty cool and refreshing." - DesolateRipper1mthPublicado por
- DesolateRipper1mthComentado porIn fact, everyone has their own preferences, and Ethan happened to be particularly interested or obsessed with legs and feet.
- DesolateRipper2mthPublicado por
the development is not bad and I even enjoy it, however I feel some distance with this Novel. The progression of the plot in general has been rather fast and finer details somewhat glossed over, it's very condensed and I'd say it's a shame but the benefit is that you actually get to see progression but the price for it is there.
- DesolateRipper2mthComentado porCh 36 Chapter no.36 Ino's Fury
- DesolateRipper2mthComentado por
welp
In the cramped quarters of his apartment, Naruto sauntered towards the single bathroom, a makeshift space with only a shower and toilet. As he closed the door behind him, he deftly jammed a kunai into the door frame to secure his privacy, for the doorknob had long been broken and his landlord had no inclination to repair it. - DesolateRipper2mthComentado porI whirled around and brought up my submachine gun as I saw a small little rusty as hell robot running out of an abandoned house onto a rundown patio screaming. "Kill the Communists!!!"
- DesolateRipper2mthComentado por
hahaha I'm sorry but I'm dipping to find something at the very least decent
They didn't know that their friendship would last for a long time and that they would face many challenges and adventures together in the future.