bigandy624

This is a good way to end a story. You tied up a few lose ends and set a new bar your mc to reach in the next installment. Kind of wish you gave us a teaser of a potential big bad coming up to hype us up more, but it's not necessary. I did notice you are including the Gotham series in this correct? Which would be cool don't get me wrong. I just hope you keep certain characters (villians) away from your supes. 90% of them I'd rather not see beyond cameos, but there are a few that'd be cool. Jerome and his brother for example. While I hated what they made him into at the finale, both are peak versions of Joker. I think it would bw cool to see your Mc interact with them and attempt to stop the birth of the clown prince of crime, only for a third true Joker to appear to fight the Bat. Also I won't lie, while my favorite character in Gotham is currently dead in your story, I was just as big a fan of Gordon in it and I'd love to see him in here.

I hope you replace Smallville's versions of the heroes with their CW counterparts. As much as I liked Smallville's green arrow Stephen Amell was just too good at it. Furthermore Bart Allen was kind of annoying... Who came up with the idea to make the flash wear a hoodie anyway? Smh. Don't know how I feel about the future revelation thing though. Felt unnecessary for the Kents to be there. I feel like you could have told them without it and then made it something Clark faced on his own, with the system forcing him to go through it like you sort have done with the future altering things he has done already. Which while i didn't comment it I thought it was a wonderful plot device. The Clark Kent has to choose to be Superman in all aspects kind of thing was great. It's not a big deal but i just thought it would help add tension without you know going down edge lord territory. I also kind of hope that instead of using Zantana Zatara (Zantana's dad) you'd bring in Kent Nelson as Clark's de facto sorcery teacher. Have him sit and wax poetic about the Justice Society and give the old man a reason to keep living. Have him have that moment the future seeing kid did in Smallville, where he touches Clark and sees a endless dream of hope. Not trying to pigeonhole it in I'm just thinking I like sappy stuff like that. I also secretly don't want him to follow Batman's path to mastery so closely lol.

I don't know what to say... This is pretty good. Your Mc is embodying Superman at this point. I have read countless Superman fics, but I don't think anyone has grounded Clark as well as you have so far. I am so absorbed by it I'm terrified you'll fall down the "Superman being evil = good plot". I have read several other superhero fics that are starting to grasp this, some have inevitably fallen down that very hole. Please don't .

I'm starting to think this is one of those accounts that steals stuff from fanfiction net and posts it here. I checked if they are the same writer and while they have the same username but I am not sure.

Salem's lot huh? That's one I'd never have thought of. I wonder what will happen with it. Enjoying what you've written so far. I think it was a good idea to have a summer arc now. What with season 2 dropping soon.

Don't get me wrong I like this, its refreshing. I just kind of hope you bring Shrek in with Fiona and donkey with a positive dpin on them.

I take it you meant to put king slayer instead of regicide? One is the act of it, the other is a title.

A young Hands. Before you knock it I think he'd be real good for whatever you plan. I have no idea if you are doing edgerunner but you could have him subplant Faraday, you know as b plot. Slowly turn into one of the big players in the town with your MC being his boogeyman. Have Hands start as low on the totem pole corpo who suddenly dips into the deep end and become a shadow like he comes to be in Pacifica. Also it'll let you develop your mc before you decide to do romance.

Honestly I'd be surprised if they grasped the concept of 0 let alone higher maths.....

I kind of changed my opinion after looking at other comments, i kind of would prefer to see the mc partnerless or have them meet someone equally as old as them or older than a 100 at least. I'd also like to see them interact with the third supernatural species in the series, the children of the moon, the true werewolves.