Demavend

I was happy to pass the previous number as a typo, but this is not acceptable from a consistency perspective. I'm having fun reading this, but feeling like your lying to your readers by not being consistent with your numbers is a bad move. The 40% threshold was hit earlier without any fanfare and then we somehow lost %age without any reason and now we're back to over 40% WTH author?

Except it can't be "round 3" based on the rules established by how the level system works. Rover is level 0 that is starting phase 3 of his first round.

Ha! He fulfilled his promise to her.

Man... by my standards he's not even that bad so far. I'd rather have this goofy dork than some of the genuine morons/assholes wearing the "protagonist" cap.

I can read some pretty dumb stuff. I can tolerate a lot in my reading diet. What I will not forgive is when you introduce the MC's mother as a widow, and then insult us readers by introducing the MC's still living and playing an active role in the family father in the very same chapter. For such a thing to happen in the very first chapter of this novel I'm lacking any confidence that things will get any better. You could have had the patriarch be an Uncle, or maybe later introduced the still alive father in some surprise reveal to show he actually survived whatever supposedly killed him, but to not even commit to what you wrote in a singular chapter disgusts me. I was having fun until the widow detail became a lie, and it makes me wonder what future detail about this story could become a lie, but fortunately for me I will not continue to read this, and I suggest anyone considering this novel to go find something else.

This does not inpire confidence to see an inconsisteny like this in the very same chapter where the mother is declared a widow.

The use of "too" here is functional, but extraordinarily clunky. The point gets across, but a better word to use instead would be "much" or "way". "Way" would be more informal, so in this particular context "much" works best.

He's damn close with how hard he flirts.

Uhhh... no thanks!