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Shoopuff1011dComentado porhugged (her) tightly while Allura took (Correction)
Logan took Hecate in his arms and hugged him tightly while Allura took Gabriel and kissed his face several times, Logan saw this and also did the same with Hecate who laughed loudly. Ana looked at the two with a soft smile, but blushed slightly the moment her eyes met Logan's.- Shoopuff1011dComentado por
(His) beautiful blue eyes changed color to amethyst purple. (Correction)
He calmly took off the mask and looked at his face which had a drastic change, before Logan was very handsome but now his beauty level is on the same level as Thomas's beauty who is a damn god! Her beautiful blue eyes changed color to amethyst purple. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
lifted (his) mask and kissed him before running to the bedroom, (Correction)
He his said goodbye to Elisa and Kate that to the surprise of the two mature women, lifted her mask and kissed him before running to the bedroom, Ana quickly followed them with her eyes shining with curiosity. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
Hecate and Gabriel snuggled into (his) lap with happy smiles, leaving Ana surprised. (Correction)
Everyone nodded and went to Allura's house, which by the way was quite big, Logan sat on the floor on a soft cushion along with everyone else, Hecate and Gabriel snuggled into her lap with happy smiles, leaving Ana surprised. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
she lifted it halfway revealing (his) soft lips (Correction)
Kate couldn't help it and tried to lift his mask and oddly enough she lifted it halfway revealing her soft lips, Logan was quite surprised, but before he could say anything Kate kissed him passionately. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
But suddenly (his) beautiful blue eyes sparkled with understanding. (Correction)
But suddenly her beautiful blue eyes sparkled with understanding. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
the exact location of their loved one and if (they) are ok. (Correction)
Description: Connects the user with the person they love most, the user will be able to know the exact location of their loved one and if he are ok. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
later (he) took a deep breath and decided to check each one of them, (Correction)
Logan was silent as he looked at all the gifts he got from Thomas, some time later he his took a deep breath and decided to check each one of them, especially the love stone. - Shoopuff1011dComentado por
Doesn't make sense?
6- 3x more points in white when passing a level. - Shoopuff1019drespondió a satoUDeaK
then edit it.
On a luxurious bed, a boy aged approximately 15 years are sitting and leaning on the mattress. The boy had a shallow breath, looking as if he had just had a bad dream. With the last curse words that came out of his mouth, the anger he experienced turned into confusion after seeing the situation around him. - Shoopuff1019dComentado por
With this money, he intends to take his girlfriend to a small restaurant. (Correction : remove "with this money" at the end)
With this money, he intends to take his girlfriend to a small restaurant with this money. - Shoopuff1019dComentado por
He earned 50 dollars from his food delivery job, which is enough for dinner at a restaurant. (no need to repeat Today)
Today he earned 50 dollars from his food delivery job, which is enough for dinner at a restaurant. - Shoopuff10115dComentado por
Cant he just use the map function and tell her his location?
Zhang Fei, slightly relieved to see Zhao Ziqin agree, immediately hugged her and asked Zhang Lingxue again. "When will you return to the Central Region? Have you managed to find Chang Wenhao?" - Shoopuff10118dComentado por
om explained as he (proceeded) to exit the room. (Correction)
"I understand fully well that you might be horny and don't feel bad for that, it's a natural phenomena we all get horny. That's why I have a good news for you," Tom explained as he process to exit the room. - Shoopuff10118dComentado por
Tom lost grip of himself and lot all control as he became lost in her beauty. (something wrong with this sentence not sure though)Too many 'lost' I think.
In the next moment, Tom lost grip of himself and lot all control as he became lost in her beauty. - Shoopuff10118dComentado por
he was really carried away (in) the moment. (Correction)
Haven's Serenade was more than just a hotel; it was a sanctuary, a place where everyone could find their true selves and thrive, but he must not betrayal his love in other to do that, he was really carried away at the moment. - Shoopuff10118dComentado por
Maybe describe the scrolls more like they feel powerful, or the MC recognize them as some old artifact scrolls he found on an adventure to give them more impact in the story.
Tom took the box from Emily and examined it. It was indeed old, with delicate carvings depicting scenes of dragons and mythical creatures. He gently opened it, revealing a collection of ancient scrolls. - Shoopuff10118dComentado por
I showed this world (compassion), I showed them mercy, (Correction)
"My life work, my family, my hotel, it's all gone," Tom added. "I did everything, I showed this world comparison, I showed them mercy, I walked away, I was the bigger man, and look what got me."