TheSeagull

I did read it, in fact I read the total of your story as thoroughly as possible so that I could give feedback as accurately as possible. However, I feel like a range of numbers is too absolute when it comes to a rough description. I apologize for offending you.

I sincerely apologize for this, I was previously unaware of this. This was my mistake due to inconsideration, and I am sorry for that.

Thank you for taking my comments seriously. However, I will have to agree to disagree with you on the misuse part.

Got it, thanks for the clarification!

I agree that I was a too harsh in my review concerning the grammar, however I still believe that many of the words were misused, such as in this case, the word 'hyperbole'. I apologize for my actions and hope that they have not caused too much harm.

Yes, I understand, but I feel like you have already gotten the point across. My mistake if it was supposed to be for extra-extra emphasis.

15(2.2). I did not mean any offense by that comment either, I was simply trying to point out what I read, however I apologize for coming off as insensitively as I did, and that was wrong of me. Once again, I sincerely apologize for any inconveniences my review may have caused you, it was wrong of me to act that way. Hopefully you do not hold any grudges from this, and we can get along in the future. I won't add a happy face to the end of the comment as I was going to, because in my experience a happy face implies sincerity and goodwill but to others it may come off as sarcastic. Instead, I hope that you have a good day, and I will try to reread your story with my newfound understanding of how it works so that I can leave a more appropriate(and respectful) review.

Alright, since you replied in a numerical format, I've decided to do my best to reply in the same manner: 1. Maybe I misinterpreted, but somewhere in the second chapter you noted that the mother had two "underage" children to feed. I'm not really sure what you mean by read the text(story?), and I wasn't sure what the rest of the first comment meant, so I've decided not to address it for fear of another misinterpretation. 2. My apologies for the assumption. Since it was tagged under Eastern fantasy I assumed it took place in the east, and made the comment. Again, I apologize for offending you, it was my mistake. 3. By this do you mean your personal background or the character's background? Because I don't really think I read far enough to get to the extended backstory part. Maybe I'll go back and give your story another go. 4/5. :) Glad I could help, but I dunno what you mean about me specifically. 6. Right, another mistake on my part. 7. Yes, I understand the point you are trying to make, however I just felt like it was a little redundant, because the other words you used already seemed to imply the monotony of his everyday life. 8. Thank you for acknowledging my comment. It means a lot that you think of me as intelligent. Also, I don't think that you should feel the need to apologize for a state of mind. It was my mistake for coming off that way, and as someone who understands how that feels I should have tried to be more considerate. Again, I apologize for my harsh criticism, and I appreciate how gracious your response was despite my obvious discourtesy. 9. Yes, this was something I recently discovered, as I haven't really touched this account in a long time, and back when I did use it, I was mainly a mobile user. 10. Now that I've read your explanation for the way the story is written, I guess it is? 11. My apologies for the insensitivity. I was trying to be polite, but I often come across as rude rather than blunt. There were definitely better ways I could have written out my review and I regret that I was not more conscientious when typing it out. 12. It was probably not a good idea for me to write a review without seriously taking note of the possible repercussions of my actions either, but here we are. 13. I do have my fair share of insecurities, and perhaps I didn't enjoy your story as much as I could have because I was projecting too much, or the writing felt too personal. I apologize again for lashing out at you when it was entirely my fault. I'm not sure what you meant by the first half though; was it that I read a lot of your story, or stories that cater mainly to the author? If it was the former, then I read a lot of the story in order to make a fair judgement, though it wasn't exactly fair in the end. If it was the latter, then yes, I do, especially when the author's view coincides with my own. 14. Yes, I understand now that you can't italicize titles. It was wrong of me to assume that. I don't know what you mean by the light hearted part. As for the remark regarding the paragraph comments, I did not take into the account the fact that others may not appreciate the same type of feedback that I do. I will try to be more considerate of this fact going forward, so thank you for bringing this to my attention. I will apologize to the other author for the italicization comments and the amount of paragraph comments, but I don't feel like much of what I said on the other review was wrong. In one of their replies to my comment, they used hyperbole to describe my comments, which is a noun, and used incorrectly. Therefore I will not apologize for pointing out their incorrect word choice. 15. I'm sure it does. I was not in the best frame of mind when I wrote said reviews, however that does not excuse my actions. Once again, I apologize for being so rude. 15(2). Yes, I have, but I'm not sure what bringing this up has to do with anything. Is it the comment about the character's relationship with his sister?

Connect the first two clauses with a semicolon instead of a comma. Otherwise, you need a conjunction.

Again, start a new paragraph when you have dialogue.