Fraktal

I don’t know how to feel about this book. The idea is great but the world building is a little nonsensical, the dialogs and motivations of the characters are somewhat flimsy and overall up to chapter 13 it is a bit dull. I struggle to keep reading but at the same time I like the idea. Anyway, I’m quite thorn about it.

The problem is as of now (14 chapter) there is almost no change from the original story. For how long will this go on, do you have an estimate so that I can just ignore all chapters until something changes?

This is fire! A pure ‘do whatever I want’ mc with a good dose of evil? I’m signing up right away! Though it would be nice to have more frequent updates. Very good writing btw.

Honestly, I have mixed feelings about this fanfic. The first problem is that too many things are happening too fast for no reason, as if to avoid giving the MC some time to think and thus he feels kinda braindead. Like how is it possible that just when he finishes his first scenario it happens to be enrollement time for the shitty academy, like in 10 minutes it seems? It’s alright if author wants to write a proper story as a fanfic but then it has to avoid having us suspend our disbelief too much. The second is that the MC is very much unlikable, at least to me. He is a proper little bitch that whines non stop and wants to ask 1000 questions at the most inappropriate times. Yes, he is a proper little whiny bitch. His supposed ‘professional con artist’ title is utter bullshit, the dude is obviously a braindead maggot that keeps on getting excited and hard as soon as he gets the most obvious thing right lol. Grinning and laughing like a fool for everyone to see, supposedly learned to control his emotions to perfection lmao, professional con artist my ass. The MC is a proper beta Japanese shonen protagonist, I’m saying as a warning for people like me who don’t like that. It would have been a much better story if the MC was a more silent type loner’ smart and ruthless based on his background of living on the streets and fending for himself as an orphan. I kept my hope up for more Than 30 chaps but he’s still a little bitch, so don’t give an MC an innapropriate background, if he is a little whiny braindead beta Then say it from the start!!! Anyway except for these points that ruin it, the rest is pretty good. I hope the author would correct these flaws in his next work (too much disbelief, wrong pacing and innapropriate MC) because he seems to have good potential!

The most forced stuff is his necessity to train harder than the main characters. What bullshit. The system is a 10x reward, he should be able to lay flat and become OP as long as he lays low and waits a little, why is he so restless to get stronger? It’s so nonsensical! He has already bound it to his twin sister who is supposed to be a monster for god’s sake. Anyway it leaves a bad taste due to this unnecessary route.

This feels very much like a randomly cobbled up together story. Things just pop outta nowhere and many settings of the world background just don’t make any sense or are forced to justify the story. The most annoying thing is the MC, he feels braindead and make stupid mistakes. You can see it clearly with the elixir thing at the beginning. He just strolls in the clan, digs an ancient elixir and goes at the center of the clan where it is watched by powerful people to give it to his sister?? WTF, how would he justify having something like that, found it on the roadside? But thankfully forced development happens and he gets beat up half to death (which he should have seen coming but we’ll be is braindead) and gets a forced opportunity to give it to his sister (like why the hell did she appear?). Same for the market where he gets pickpocketed in his own clan’s market. Anyway the story is full of cliche forced development such as this. It’s sad. It could have been good.

It should be a problem with the shameless google translation. Months should be weeks and then it adds up.

If you keep going like that with a detach scientist wit some lustful tendencies, and with the future harem that is shaping up at chapter 4, this will be good :)

Very well done. The story flows like smooth butter! I like where it is going (as of chap 37), and really hope you don’t drop it. If you can increase releases a bit it would be even more perfect :)

Why no updates? I hope this isn’t dropped.