I must have made a mistake, it happens.

So far no one, he is just a kid and I think it is preferable to strengthen the plot, which as many mention is quite weak.

why doesn't your review appear in the story... I don't quite understand your anger, but I'm glad you delivered your point of view. Thank you my friend. 👍👍

yes, it has some mistakes but it's not my style to make characters that can defeat everyone from the beginning, I like naive characters in the beginning, that mature and change over time. Of course your review is appreciated because I can see OTHER people's comments, thanks for the summary of comments.

Excellent idea

I totally agree, unfortunately William is not me.

thanks, I really try to do my best to keep the story moving at a good pace.

but that's harry potter xD

Yes, I have some mistakes, I will pay more attention in the future.

Jajajajaja xD

por que aun no es tiempo de brillar xD

nah

es un arco especial pero pronto seguire con la historia principal

la verdad estaba un poco desconectado ya que trabajo en el desarrollo de algunos eroges pero intentare volver mas seguido y actualizar lo mas pronto posible.

si, estoy acumulando ideas xD

I am working for that

I am working for that

soy buena persona, le deje a la santa de Asia

exactaamente, tengo varios planes para la historia y esta es una manera para revivirla, un pequeño arco

Gracias Men, estas críticas son las necesarias para crecer como autor y reconocer los fallos. Es como dices el comienzo tiene muchos fallos y aunque lo esté intentando arreglar ahora no es suficiente.