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honestly I don't mind gore, anti hero and selfish,ko, mc but here, it's corss the limit it's like venting dark desire through the story which cannot happen in real life many people call mc selfish, self centered and egoistic but here that's not case it's almost like venting own feeling that want to do in real
well , ait start I liked the story but from some point I just can't imagine that how is it still going on . like characters are all disappearing without reason or sense . like guiding fish or what not is his pet .. but where the hell is that? lin clan second elder tried to kill him so many times first elder was good to him but they just suddenly disappeared. what the hell ? moving on bigger plots without wrapping smaller ones when you have power and just sell sell sell its almost become like this is not novel but a fantasy book which records all items of that world nothing more. till where I read . I can't say for future chapter. I can't read more even if plot devlops it's just I can't cope with it now
I like story at over all but one thing I don't like it it too much scheming. Yes it is good thing but why like gold expert stephon can be counted for his parents death but he is just subjugating him for schemes. but if saying scheming is good but taking down such characters bring more to emotional development you can have used other ways to hide news but keeping him alive don't sit well it makes me think mc is too inhuman no matter how much he help devlope his sister and rose in a way I feel he just give up on his parents when he just subjugated him instead of eliminating him
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
now here is my question if he has 1000 fold system why can't galaxy origin multiple by 1000 time
too much filler. less story devlopment lack of human relations and emotional quotient as all its is like a commentary of a single players game
bro not mob he just literally added a comedian elite mob to wipe normal mob and forcefully pulled Vivi till now whose story already ended🤣🤣
that's point but it's like author is just copy pasting man . I say don't add drastic change in plot but just add a little change in plot if you insert character
wow I think same at least author must change things little he is just describing straw hat journey with little tweak and MC perspective I say he just added a elite mob nothing much
here is the point man every thing is good expect 1 thing?? why are you copying and pasting one piece. If I say you are portraying MC as 3rd character view you just made him a mob like. if you don't change any thing or plot just keep MC for mob cleaning job?? you may try to make MC revalent a little as I see you are only copy pasting original one piece MC is just a elite mob which wipes weaker mob. It's not a story man there is almost no development of MC he is just getting stronger as elite mob. as I liked it at start personality of MC but through mid way I just started to doze of as it becomes more and more revalent that it almost copy paste just a little tweak and MC perspective added