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if you add Sanda into it then it could work in MMA.
cat video is way better than this, what utter shit of an author
everything is cringe in this, the OPMC is annoying already, the martial art that the character learn make no sense it's obvious the school is a MC Dojo getting a black belt before 12 years old not even prodigy is given that before they reach an appropriate age in a real Dojo. the dialog is just unnatural, might as well get rid of the family and start em at the orphanage. 50 chapter in is nothing but info dumb are you writing a story or a fucking wiki author. why does every single fanfic need to be in a first person, does any of you aware how hard it is to write this way, why not using a limited third person that way you are t going to be stuck info dumping on us reader.
Interesting start but the story stretch and take about 100+ to finish the chamber of secret arc while it can be finish with only 90 chapter with better pacing.
Not my cuppa tea, the beginning is fun enough to read, but the system shown in this is something that I do not enjoy reading. The plot armour is strong that include the character's luck which diminished my enjoyment of reading it. Prefer reading fanfic that obey the world law after making it whatever the author want. good time waster, but not enough for glowing review
you should have a set up chapter before plunging into sanada is suspected, a chapter for the third guilt dealing with his student and his teacher disappointment, we should get into his mindset first. then open the next chapter with conflict between the third guilt and Danzo with how to deal with Sanada sudden power upgrade. the next chapter then should be dealing with Sanada thought and reflecting what he should and shouldn't do, a conflict of his mind between following canon when convention to him or doing what right even if canon is no more. and while Naruto and Jiraiya retrieve tsunade if you follow it, make a relaxing chapter flesh out the main character with interaction with other jonin sensei. personally your story is very fast paced which is not wrong but the story felt it has no set up and just happen to me at least, also instead showing the system you could make it as a passing.