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Initially, the AI was lighter, although the text remained verbose, later, the AI became extremely cumbersome, with growing distrust, short and direct sentences... the same as always. It's a shame.

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I liked this story more at the beginning, but the time jump made me reconsider. Everything is happening very fast-paced and the progression isn't clear, one moment he's 8 years old, the next he's 14, and then he's already in his twenties. I thought that with the start of TBBT it would slow down, but in just a few chapters years had already passed again. Besides this lukewarm relationship with Penny, it's impossible to tell if it will cool down or heat up, the focus is irritating for something you don't know how long it will last. Maybe the resolution will be in the next chapter, maybe it will take another fifty or a hundred, I just know I'm no longer interested in finding out. It became clear that this is the kind of story that goes through someone's entire life before giving a conclusion like "the journey was difficult, there may have been setbacks, but everything ended on a positive note", you know, like Forrest Gump, not that it's bad, but it wasn't what I expected... anyway, for those who like it and those who don't mind, feel free.

Are you questioning how they're going to save money? So you expect them to be poor for the rest of their lives, never, ever having the possibility of renting a boat? But let's suppose you lack imagination and that I can give you some ideas. Like someone on the reservation having a fishing boat they could lend. Like Mike having some random rich relative like a grandmother or uncle with money to spare. Like Mike and Leah hunting for some indefinite period and selling the meat and hides just to save enough money for it. Like them waiting until the future when Mike has finished school and maybe college, works and earns money for it. Like... Anyway, I'm not saying to do this now, bro, stop trying to find obstacles and start thinking about it as a possibility, a possibility for the future or something the author might not even explore.

You guys talk like the guy told him to spend his life at sea, lmao. Just rent the boat during both of their vacations, go fishing, if they're lucky they could make hundreds of thousands, if not millions of dollars. Besides, Mike can "communicate" with the fish, he could find some treasure at the bottom of the sea or something. They would only need to do it once and receive a good reward, so why do you act like he's going to become a sailor permanently? lol, look at these guys...

Man... I wanted to be nice, there aren't many TBBT fanfics out there, I was hoping to strike gold but... Constant mistakes, the MC's paranoia and the character's nonsensical actions. I mean, the protagonist only mentioned that Bitcoin could be a usable currency in the future, acted a little more confidently and bought a large quantity of The Walking Dead comics, but that made Leonard and Sheldon look like two detectives thinking there was something very wrong with Stuart. It didn't seem realistic at all.

Happy for you, bro.

Cons: -He had sex with his system. (nasty) -He seems like a character with Don Juan syndrome mixed with pop culture. -Everyone seems to speak the same way, literally everyone, short, direct sentences laced with sarcasm and/or double meanings. At first, it's bearable, but it gets tiring, at least I did. It's as if the same actor plays all the characters. Pros: -It's a readable Spider-Man fanfic with a MC who doesn't think "With great powers... blah blah blah." *Edited 2x