iAmJaMz

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It's actually better to wear some clothes. if you're exposed to the sun, you'll burn your skin, getting blisters. Also, your sweat is meant to keep you cool, without anything to keep it contained, you're just gonna burn up.

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Edit "tear" to "tier".

I couldn't deal with the edgy dialogue. Important factors of the story were forced, like extremely forced. Some grammar issues but not the worse. My deciding factor to drop the book was the was the edgy and cringe dialogue. I wasn't didn't see it being developed into something more interesting. BUT if you don't mind the dialogue and some forced development, then you'll be fine. Wish you well author, and hope you improve.

Thanks for chapter again.

Thanks for chapter.