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LoveJoy

LoveJoy

Lv5

Story telling is an art. Where imagination reign supreme....

2017-11-17 Se unióPhilippines
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  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy2 years ago
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    Nice!! Now, I want to see how will the consequences play out.

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    Great! Great! I love how they all felt alive. it's just a pity that you can not explore the filial part of life in this novel as the tag of 'Thrown Bastard' remained it his head and he can not get over it. I just also suggest to make the dialogue more proper it's hard to read it when you don't know where to suddenly stop and you need to read couple back to make some sense to it. Good Job! Thank you! Don't Drop it!

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    I could say that this type of fanfiction is starting to be so much bothering that the word Evil MC become disgusting. Did you ever find someone who try to make so much reason for something they do this it. Their reason were so saturated that you automatically started to grit your teeth and look away. I'm starting to think if ever some author started to feel if their characters are even alive? Their characters, motive and ideals become so shallow that even if I try to justify it with long prologue that just become a garbage that won't be remembered 'Wasted time'. I'm ranting because you created a MC who feel so paper thin that will be forgotten after an hour or another facfict came out. Focus on one thing, please... you want power? Make it with adventure, Fuck it was full of vengeance that it feels so disturbing at the start. He is already an Emo at the very start. The world is create to facilitate the fantasy of people bro... The great wide world, then you painted it just red and black, done.

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    Just finish reading the current chapter and this makes me think. This fanfiction sure is very great. This is what you long for when you read things out. You can place your shoe in his and let you think. This cliff-hanger is so great that it gives more impact due to the foreshadowing you pulled earlier. Will the MC kill her? or Will he not? There will be a massive butterfly effect if he did so. Just think about a bunch of mutant kids becoming some lab rat that will also breed another lines of hatred aimed at his loved nation and his circle. Or rather another group emerging with more grande ideals than Magneto from her circle of kids. 👌👌

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    Author, you're making me and other reading seems to be stupid right? Can you atleast make your story straight. things are very confusing and the way you execute things seems like a child tantrum. Jason died without much explanation after a scream with MC still outside. Let it slide but killed an OC you inserted and didn't even make it worth. You're playing with us and it looks hateful. Thanks for the Chapter.

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  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    Author, you're making me and other reading seems to be stupid right? Can you atleast make your story straight. things are very confusing and the way you execute things seems like a child tantrum. Jason died without much explanation after a scream with MC still outside. Let it slide but killed an OC you inserted and didn't even make it worth. You're playing with us and it looks hateful. Thanks for the Chapter.

    Este capítulo ha sido eliminado.
  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    It seems the character become more lifeless.

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    It's Great! It's already great for me. You're making this vomit inducing world that only exist to satisfy ego and wishes to a vivid world that every character that only revolves for being beautiful and powerful to a 3D one. It feels more alive that every chapter you upload is like a new arrangement of a song. Just Continue Adding new artistic color to those bland one and keep making to story alive. To much fanservice ruin the novel but your story within the novel is melding it back for me. Thank You! Good Job!

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    Forced.... way too forced bro. Killing mercilessly like some xianxia protagonists when Kurama can sense emotion from others knowing no harm will be brought to him. It breaks the current status of his mentally. I love how you the story is going on it's just this chapter seems planned but not very well executed. Foreshadowing shows the tension of searching but it burst like some bubble so quick so much disappointing but it's a fanfic so pretty much okay. Thanks for the Chapter.

  • LoveJoy
    LoveJoy4 years ago
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    First time I read a female lead novel and I love how sharp and vengeful woman can be when their tail is stepped on. Good read keep it up Author!