Dope...SI mink/fish boi 50 or yrs before cannon. long chps, no DF but superstrong and joins a legendary and strongest crew as a member. If u dont know what crew this is, shame on u.
5/5 but 3/5.
you cant just tell that the MC became a boss/gang leader of the fishman island and just leave it that. that shit is interesting, should be explored and you know shown, what happened, how he did it, etc.
Same thing with his crew, all the events just happen, joins, fights, crew dissloves, MC fights a certain marine and all this in like 2 chps.
This shit is probably the most interesting shit but its all glossed over, just stated like a log or something, no mention of crew relationships, journey, the world exploration, none of it.
Powers, same thing again...mink/fish boi thats SI...Sure powers arent a focus cause its not visual but still interesting to read about, how he used his SI knowledge to make attacks, become stronger, etc.
Also the world, like or a decade but nothing about the world is explored or mentioned, not the fishman island, MC journey , MC journey with crew, etc. its like 50 yrs before cannon would be cool to see what you would've made of it.
Then there MC, his character development, how he come to terms with his life, his mindset, ideas, character relationships, that should be explored.
suggestion; flashback style chps that explain/explore the points above.
normally I;d say its too soon to judge a story with 3 chps, but when over a decade of time is just glossed over in 2 chps along with the points mentioned above, it inst, really suggest you slow down, idea is dope and some interesting shit here, just not explored.
anyway GL.
pumpkin
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