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The walking dead Carl Grimes twin brother

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This is an oc not reborn, he will go through a lot of conflict through the first two Seasons before finally becoming the loner who would do anything for he or his family’s survival.

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Chapter 1Birth

On June 27, 1999) in this room people could hear a women in pain she was having a baby and when it was over she felt more pain and the doctor says "well it looks like maybe your having twins." she was visibly annoyed that she had to go through more pain but she says "c'mon lets do it." about and hour later it was finally over, and the people in the room noticed the babies didn't look like each other they were fraternal twins.

The doctor finally placed the baby's in her hands and she looks at her husband rick happily whilst crying in what my be pain or joy she says "rick they are finally here." rick is a 5' 10" man with blueish grey eyes and a very well shaped jaw line with handsome features, he smiles and says "what are we going to name them Lori."

Lori was a beautiful women she had hazel nut eyes with a pointed jawline with delicate features.

she smiles at the older twin and says "I want to name him carl." rick smiles and nods and says "how about we name the younger Zane." she nods and smiles and says "I like those names I hope they grow happily what if we do a bad job." rick looks at her and then the babies and says "we don't know how well we will do until we try do we." she just says "I'm still in pain I need more rest." rick nods and says "rest well." and then he leaves and goes home.

The doctor then takes carl and Zane to the newborn nursery. Two years later rick and Lori noticed that Zane was different from carl he doesn't cry and he barely pays attention to anything a normal baby would.

After four years had passed Zane and carl were now six years old and Zane and carl were really close, but they were polar opposites and you could tell, they would always get in disagreements and squabbles, a few of them led to fights between the two. Zane and his parents were really close and he never got into any trouble due to the fact he would always somehow perfectly place the blame on carl.

One day while they were having dinner Zane asked his parents "mom dad can I please take karate and kendo." they look at each other and say "well we will think about it ok." he looks sad like always and says "please mom dad I never ask for anything." rick looks at Zane's pleading face and says "fine." Zane almost screams yes but stops himself and says "thank you." his parents nod and he finishes his food quickly and goes to his room he waits for carl to come and then he trying his hardest to look cool says "mom and dad like me more loser." carl looks at him and says 'all I have to do is ask to and they will say yes dummy." and as you guessed this turned into a fight and ended with rick breaking them up and yelling at them after.

A week passed and it was finally time for Zane to start his karate and kendo classes, carl was tagging along to because he asked and that made Zane kind of mad but he didn't say anything. Zane and carl did great for their first day with Zane doing a lot better in kendo in karate Zane was good but a little worse than carl.

Things went by like this for a while until it had been 3 years and they were nine now, they also had the highest belts you could get in those martial arts, Zane was very proficient when it came to karate but he would rather utilize his kendo and the reverse was for carl he was very proficient in kendo but he would rather use his karate, they were strong for their age as well but that was from all the training and the talent they had because that was a quick time for anyone to master those two martial arts.

Since they had learned all they could from kendo and karate they were thinking about asking their mom and dad to go learn more martial arts, so they ask if they could go to a local MMA gym so they could learn both striking and grappling. their parents agree of course because when they let them do karate and kendo their discipline went through the roof and their obedience, so what could be the harm in letting them do MMA training.

One week passed and it was finally time for them to start their training they learned MMA was a lot harder than what they were doing before and they didn't get the hang of it that quickly this time, but they were still pretty good for beginners they started to get the hang of it slowly but surely.

And before they knew it a three years passed and they were twelve now Zane and carl were both 5'6" with carl having kind of short blackish brown hair that goes to his eyebrows he had greenish blue eyes with a good jawline with handsome features, Zane on the other hand had long blackish brown hair that went down to his lower back tied in a ponytail. and some going to his upper eyes he had blueish hazel eyes with a good jawline with handsome yet delicate features like his mom.

Carl was a very good striker with a decent grappling and ground game. Zane was a grappler with excellent ground game and and alright striking game but he made up for that with his great karate but he could still improve on his striking since it has only been a year, two years passed after that and now Carl and Zane were balanced with their grappling and striking they had improved a lot and their coach even thought about putting them in competitions.

But their mom said no she didn't want them to get hurt, so one day when carl and Zane got home they saw their mom looking really sad so they ask "mom what's wrong." she cry's and tells them that their dad was shot and now he is in a comma which makes carl and Zane nearly fall to their knees this is the worst they've ever felt about something.

Zane still trying not to cry and with a shaky voice says "can we go visit him to see how he's doing." she nods and they get ready and head to the hospital once they get their they go to their dads room, they see him unconscious and weak and this nearly breaks Zane because he has always seen his dad as strong and powerful but now he was a weak shell of his former self he couldn't even use the bathroom by himself, Zane thinks "this cant be real I'm dreaming right my dad will be alright right."

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Deleted my previous review as my main issue (the spacing) was fixed (thank you for that, author! Much easier to read now). Since you took the time to do that, I'll give a real review (I know, on webnovel?! There are no real reviews here!). Writing quality still isn't the best; some unnatural sounding dialogue and punctuation. It's a bit odd though. On one hand, you take the time to describe the characters (which I like), on the other, you get lazy with some character interactions (saying 2 people have a normal relationship instead of showing how it's normal). Given that this is a fanfic, it is arguably much more important to focus on the relationships between characters and develop in that direction, since we can already picture every character (excluding OC). Seems to be updated with some frequency, which is a plus, especially considering the lack of reviews. Character design is far from the worst. Carl changes a bit (which he should! Having a sibling vs. growing up an only child is bound to effect things). Biggest issue for me is their development rate. This is a place where less detail would have been better. Mastering karate and kendo in 3 years is crazy, especially for 7-10 year olds. You could have just said they took these disciplines for a few years and advanced quickly since you want to give them a background in martial arts. Noone would bat an eye at that point if they do something involving either; being so specific about their progression makes it unbelievable. 5"7' at 10 is huge too, but not unheard of at least. Most fanfic authors seem to have this trouble of making children giants for some reason. World background: not much to say, its walking dead. Background for the world should be known if you're reading a fanfic on it. I won't make comment on story development since I've only read to chapter 4. Unfortunately, I won't be reading further than that. Story immersion is huge for me and when something ruins that it makes the story unenjoyable. I don't mean this review to sound disparaging (sorry if it does). I just figured you'd prefer a real review to see what needs to be worked on to a half assed "3 stars, not reading more" kind of review that doesn't tell you whats good or bad. If you work on this fic for a while, then decide to make a new fanfic or overhaul this one after you've gotten more experience, shoot me a message! I'd like to read something of yours thats more polished.

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