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Great Story thus far. A little too quick in pacing in my opinion due to the 5 year time skip where nothing to the reader's knowledge occurred that was worth while. I would probably recommend when you do the rewrite like you said that you don't just completely skip that time and maybe add a bit of his efforts during this time. Maybe he does a bit of classical theatre acting or a couple of gigs at bars. It just seems like 5 years is a bit excessive time skip in a world without supernatural ability or an ability to extend his life even if it is realistic.